Feedback on a Breeding Story

TheFarthestWriter

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Hey all, can I get some feedback on how to make this story a bit more interesting?

Title: The Wife Collector
Setting: Modern times
Looking for female writer.

My character is a wealthy western businessman who conducts much of his business in the east, buying out small companies and street vendors, with a goal to own as much of the basic economy of those countries as possible. Vying with the large corporations that are present in those countries is my goal, those large corporations really only pandering to the 5% wealthy of the society who can afford their products. My acquisitions are strategically made to gain control over all the "small guys" on the street, the small mom and pop stores that no one cares about, because these are the businesses that the rest of the 95% of the population engage with.

I've been doing this in a variety of non-western countries, including some middle of the road countries - places like Ukraine, Slovakia, Romania, Pakistan, India, the Middle East - all over.

But I also have another goal. I collect "wives". I have at least fifteen already, most often requested by my character as part of the deal to increase the amount I'll purchase the business for. I have them all ages, from different countries. I have a need for new wives (it's the only way the families will give their daughters to me anyway, if I formally "marry" them), and I desire to make sure they are all impregnated as much as possible. It is part of my character's desire for his own "empire" in the world.

In this setting, my female writing partner can choose who and what she'd like to be. I was imagining someone young and petite, totally innocent, but aware of the situation she is getting into. But I'll let my partner decide how she'd want to enter into the story. There are lots of ways things could go. I was thinking she'd resent the fact that (1) she has to be given away to me and (2) that she is one more woman among many. Each my character's "wives" get their own place, and sometimes he keeps one of them with him to make sure there's a good chance of them getting pregnant. There could be non con elements as well.

Obliviously this has the option to get other female writers involved as well (but if you'd like to keep it one on one in terms of writing that's fine), if we so choose to explore the dynamics of having an international harem of "wives" that may end up meeting each other from time to time. There may be much intrigue (plots to escape or encite rebellion), politics (plots to become more close to my character for the perks that it comes with), and other elements.
 
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