Feedback Needed for Vampire Story

[TalyisBagley]

Hello

I need feedback on the continuation of my Vampire Serial Of Thorns and Pearls. http://www.literotica.com/s/of-thorns-and-pearls

I have the majority of the story mapped out and 80% written but I am stuck and I have holes that link to chapter 1.

Please read Of Thorns and Pearls and provide any feedback through this survey form:
https://***************/spreadsheet/viewform?formkey=dERLTDVveTV3S2psNnhQOTFtTEdZVXc6MQ#gid=0