Feedback for "The Power: Chapter 1"

[Smut_Supreme]

Hello to all! I wrote my first story for Literotica just a few weeks ago and, although I received feedback, I would love to get more. Be aware that this isn't a romance story, it is simply a sex story so please don't criticize the fact that it lacks sentimentality. I know that. It is also a story of fantastically large body parts (breasts, penis, ass, etc) so understand that prior to reading. I just want feedbak on how to keep the story going, what avenues I could explore, and different ways I could experiment with the plot. Thank you very much.

 

[PacoFear]

Read it. Wow. Okay. So, umm, yeah. *gulp*

I guess he'll probably have to wander out and find himself another girl to do, errr, perform, no, perpetrate... that stuff... you described. In the story.

 

[CWatson]

Smut,

Could you provide a link? Something like 300 stories are posted to Lit every day. That's daunting for us to wade through, and there's no guarantee we'll find it. (Plus, we're all lazy buggers, but, that's another matter. )

 

[PennLady]

Well I read it and...I don't know. You say it's just a sex story so unless you're going to develop the characters, I can't quite see what more you can do. It seems like if you don't do a little more, then all you'll really have is repetitive stuff: large guy finds girl and...they have large sex.

I do appreciate that you made allowances to fit the huge cock inside; one of my pet peeves is ridiculously-endowed men. I mean, please. It...won't fit.

Anyway, I could see a couple of possibilities

-- he could meet his match in a woman who has the same ability, and she'd get the "jump" on him, so to speak
-- he could lose his ability, at least temporarily