Feedback for my first story?

[CompletedXvids]

Hey folks, I’d really appreciate anyone taking the time to read my story and leave feedback- good or bad.
It’s my first story and im thick enough skinned to accept it won’t be perfect!
It’s titled ‘ Romantic BBC seduction’ and it’s in the erotic couplings section.

Thanks

 

[SyleusSnow]

Link?

 

[lovecraft68]

Link

https://www.literotica.com/s/romantic-bbc-seduction