Feedback for "I Want to Get Raped"

[thebobber326]

https://literotica.com/s/i-want-to-get-raped
I appreciate any and all feedback.

 

[Rob_Royale]

I can understand the want of being taken or forced or degraded. There are ways of experiencing those things within the confines of "consensual sex" without the violence of rape. Rape is a "nope" word for me, and I'd expect it to be for most folks on this site. I'll pass your story by if rape is in the title and stop reading if I find the act inside the story. Rape is not sexual it is violence. It is abhorrent. I skimmed through the story and the writing seems fine.

I implore you to find a way to express those desires within the confines of consensual sex, perhaps through a BDSM scenario. Otherwise, I feel only a small minority of readers will be interested.

For instance. Wife tells husband her rape fantasy. Hubby is an open-minded fella and secretly makes some arrangements. A few days later he initiates sex and she's down with it. She grins as he buckles the leather cuffs on her. At that instant, a huge man dressed in black, with gloves and a mask explodes into the room. The wife is initially frightened when hubby whispers that Big John is there to fulfill her fantasy. Then he looks her in the eye and says, "YES or NO." She whispers yes.

Big John grabs hubby's leg and drags him off the bed and out of the room. Slams and locks the door. Sex unfolds much as you described it.
Afterward, as she's lying there exhausted, Big John whispers if she tells anyone he'll be back and she'll get double. Then he leaves.
A few minutes later Hubby walks in and tells her that he was outside the whole time and if she'd ever said stop or no, he'd have shut it down.

She tells him how awesome it was, gives him the blow job of his life, and they both live happily ever after.
Easy-peasy.

I'm sure there are some rape fantasy/forced sex stories here, that might help you figure your story out better. Describing an actual rape is bad form in my opinion.

 

[lovecraft68]

I love how this site claims it doesn't allow rape stories, but let's one through with a title like this.

 

[KeithD]

You write well (there was at least one instance of falling out of past tense into present and then back again), and I can understand writing something like this to let imagination rip. I'm surprised, given the site rules and that, the last I knew, it didn't even permit "rape" to be used as a tag, that it passed here. There are other sites that acknowledging acceptance of fantasies to this extreme.

 

[thebobber326]

I can understand the want of being taken or forced or degraded. There are ways of experiencing those things within the confines of "consensual sex" without the violence of rape. Rape is a "nope" word for me, and I'd expect it to be for most folks on this site. I'll pass your story by if rape is in the title and stop reading if I find the act inside the story. Rape is not sexual it is violence. It is abhorrent. I skimmed through the story and the writing seems fine.

I implore you to find a way to express those desires within the confines of consensual sex, perhaps through a BDSM scenario. Otherwise, I feel only a small minority of readers will be interested.

For instance. Wife tells husband her rape fantasy. Hubby is an open-minded fella and secretly makes some arrangements. A few days later he initiates sex and she's down with it. She grins as he buckles the leather cuffs on her. At that instant, a huge man dressed in black, with gloves and a mask explodes into the room. The wife is initially frightened when hubby whispers that Big John is there to fulfill her fantasy. Then he looks her in the eye and says, "YES or NO." She whispers yes.

Big John grabs hubby's leg and drags him off the bed and out of the room. Slams and locks the door. Sex unfolds much as you described it.
Afterward, as she's lying there exhausted, Big John whispers if she tells anyone he'll be back and she'll get double. Then he leaves.
A few minutes later Hubby walks in and tells her that he was outside the whole time and if she'd ever said stop or no, he'd have shut it down.

She tells him how awesome it was, gives him the blow job of his life, and they both live happily ever after.
Easy-peasy.

I'm sure there are some rape fantasy/forced sex stories here, that might help you figure your story out better. Describing an actual rape is bad form in my opinion.

I really appreciate your feedback and I completely understand and respect your discomfort with the subject. My portrayal is 100% unrealistic and I make that very clear at the end.

However, this was the story that I was interested in writing, and it was not about consensual sex. If few people are interested in that, that's a shame but the way I see it, I am writing for those who do like fantasies like this, and I've found that there is certainly an audience for it, even if it is small. The scenario you described is a completely different one that isn't as exciting for me. Thank you anyway for your feedback.

 

[thebobber326]

You write well (there was at least one instance of falling out of past tense into present and then back again), and I can understand writing something like this to let imagination rip. I'm surprised, given the site rules and that, the last I knew, it didn't even permit "rape" to be used as a tag, that it passed here. There are other sites that acknowledging acceptance of fantasies to this extreme.

Thanks for the writing feedback! As for rape on the website, it can't be used as a tag (I tried), but it can be used in the title. I think the general rule regarding rape is that as long as the victim enjoys it in some way, the story can be published, which is arguably worse than just letting anything go through.