Feedback for first EC story

[LOAnnie2]

Seeking feedback for first EC story

Well, I finally branched out and posted my first non-non consent/reluctance story. So far the readers of EC are being great with their votes, but the feedback itself is a little lacking, so could use some from anyone interested. Thanks!

http://www.literotica.com/s/in-kind

 

[Ohsh]

This story was horrible and I hope you never publish anything in Erotic Couplings ever again.

Ok, that was just to make sure you won't stop writing nc/r stories. If you're still reading...

I really liked it.

The first few lines grab the reader's attention, and the story is told clearly, despite switching from current to earlier events - good job on that.

The story is short and to the point (not a complaint) but you still took the time to develop two interesting characters - I wouldn't mind reading another (unrelated ?) story featuring Lanae.

The sex is plentiful and hot, without going over the top. A good mix of fun, tension, and lust.

I'm not experienced enough as a writer to give useful advice, but I noticed it was your first story told from a male point of view. If you're wondering, I thought you did a good job with the perspective.

To sum things up, it was well written and easy to read, hot and original. Three thumbs up.

Keep on writing.

 

[Fyrewing]

I left some commentary at the story. Good read!

 

[Tyro999]

... So far the readers of EC are being great with their votes, but the feedback itself is a little lacking, so could use some from anyone interested.

For a short, one-night-standish one-page vignette, there's not much room for a standing ovation or a round of hisses and boos. The story used an interesting premise as a starting point, was well-written without any egregious spelling/grammar errors to yank me out of it, and I liked it. Including the interesting way the girl left her phone # for the boy. In my case, that was what got the bonus points that tipped the story into solid 5 territory.

I don't do NC/R, but any time you want to venture into EC again I'll be happy to see it.

 

[LOAnnie2]

thanks for the feedback. It was a little unnerving not getting any for so long on my first non non-consent story. Though you can definitely tell watching the votes that there are haters or those trying to game the system, which is too bad.