Feedback for an ongoing story.

[dlake]

I've been working on this off and on for a few years now. I know where it's headed, but it's hard to find the time to flesh it all out. This is the fifth entry, but I tried to write it so that it should be easy to jump in without having to read the backstory. There is a bit story preceding it though, if you are interested.

It's basically about two best friends who jack off together. It explores the dynamic of their friendship and the people around them. The previous chapters introduced the sister of one of the protagonists, her college roommate, and how they fit into their secret hobby. The first entry was written years ago and I'm starting to feel a little more comfortable with storytelling. So, if anyone could give any helpful feedback, I would very much appreciate it. Thank you so much.

You can find this at:

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-jack-off-sessions-ch-05

 

[sr71plt]

You might get more interest for this if you give a firm commitment on when the series is going to be finished--and then stick with it (better yet, that you don't mention it again until it IS finished and you can believably project a conclusion time frame). If this is spinning out over a "few years" with no assurance of a conclusion in the reader's lifetime, that isn't much incentive to keep following it--and certainly not in giving time and attention on giving feedback on bits and pieces of it.

 

[dlake]

I imagine that this storyline will conclude with one more entry. I hope to finish it up by the end of the year, at the latest. I do, however, plan to tell other stories that include some of the same characters.

This is really just an outlet to improve on my storytelling while exploring some past experiences in a fictional manner. I realize that this series has been drawn out and a little unfocused. But now that I have an outline, I'm confident that I can wrap it up with a proper conclusion.

I rarely, if ever, receive feedback on anything that I write in my public life, so it would be nice to hear any critiques on the writing and storytelling itself. Thanks.