Feedback desired

[mojavejoe420]

I've posted 3 out of 4 parts to a story series, my first ever erotic attempt. The first two parts I got some decent feedback, the 3rd hardly any. So... am just concerned a bit if the writing sucks, the story sucks, the sex sucks, or it's just bad luck and nobody has seen it?

I was trying to write a story that not only had sex in it but also some deeper meanings, feelings, etc.

I also write these stories in a rather fragmented fashion due to issues at home etc. So perhaps the story shows that, I'm not sure.

I would greatly appreciate any feedback, negative or positive, as long as there's a constructive element to it.

The story involves a sister helping her brother 'come of age'. "My sister, and her friends". Great title, huh. I don't know how to link to it, but it's under my name.

Thank you for your consideration!

 

[sr71plt]

More will make the effort to look at your stories if you include a link to them.

Also, it's natural for comments/votes/views to decrease as a chaptered series spins out.

 

[RedMonkeyButt]

I've posted 3 out of 4 parts to a story series, my first ever erotic attempt. The first two parts I got some decent feedback, the 3rd hardly any. So... am just concerned a bit if the writing sucks, the story sucks, the sex sucks, or it's just bad luck and nobody has seen it?

I was trying to write a story that not only had sex in it but also some deeper meanings, feelings, etc.

I also write these stories in a rather fragmented fashion due to issues at home etc. So perhaps the story shows that, I'm not sure.

I would greatly appreciate any feedback, negative or positive, as long as there's a constructive element to it.

The story involves a sister helping her brother 'come of age'. "My sister, and her friends". Great title, huh. I don't know how to link to it, but it's under my name.

Thank you for your consideration!

To link to a story, go to the stories first page and copy the url (or copy it from your author page, it's at the bottom of the grey info box). Then come to the forum and use the [*url]paste the url here[*/url] tags. Don't include the * in the brackets, I only used those so the bracketed tags would show up.

 

[sr71plt]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1526241&page=submissions

Here's the link to your page. And I don't understand what your concern is about. The ratings on this story are going up and the last two parts are well H (at least until you mentioned them on the forum. They well now could attract trolls).

This isn't a critique site. This is advertised as a reading site. There's no requirement or Web site pressure for readers to do anything but read.

 

[mojavejoe420]

Thanks. I see the "H" but I don't know what that means. "Hot"? I guess the "N" means new? I'm a newb here, sorry. thanks for the tips.

 

[sr71plt]

The red H is for anything rating about a 4.5 out of 5. The N is for "new," yes.