Feedback appreciated..Cum Sail Away

[stlucialover]

I'm looking for any feedback on my first story!
hope to hear if people enjoyed it. What parts were your favorite? Any particular section turn you on more than others?
The title is Cum Sail Away by Stlucialover in the group section.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=26033




thanks for your interest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[Black_Bird]

While I did enjoy your story and love your setting, I would have liked to see you focus a little more on spelling/grammer mistakes... there are quite a few in there!

I really do like the sailing theme, though...

 

[Guest]

verry hot!

just wanted to say my cock is still rock hard from your
story!!!
keep it up!!

 

[Guest]

cum sail away

I'm cumming along on your next boat trip!!
Love the way u played with your lovers balls and ass
while u sucked him! Your story made me cummmmm
more than I have in a long time!

 

[Guest]

cum sail away

My husband and I really loved your story..
i would love to have experienced that foursome!!
I have always thought it would be hot to see him suck or get
fucked by another guy..and i am curious about doing another
girl myself..
plz keep writing!!
newcummer

 

[zenithoclock]

That was one of the hottest stories I have yet read on this site. Excellent job for a first story! My favorite part was the shower scene...very hot!

 

[Guest]

mmf my favorite!!

i wish you had included some intermingling of the two guys and the girls...maybe had the one guy fuck the others wife while the other hunk fucked the first in his ass!
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm