Fantasy story; looking for an editor

[Reinhold]

Brief synopsis: A modern soldier is whisked into the past of Germanic Legend after hiking through an old forest and sleeping with a forest spirit. (That being the gimmick to get a modern voice into a medieval setting) He attaches himself to a couple of legendary figures, and over the course of a number of chapters, proceeds to fight and sleep his way to reach the conclusion of the legend, figuring out what happened to him and how it relates to the world around him as he goes.

It's told in the first person, which in retrospect may not have been a wise decision. Although it makes it easy to write a complete character, I discovered it doesn't lend itself well to a seduction scene. Who knew? But, that die has already been cast. Would *welcome* advice for working in the First Person. Seriously.

It's based on real, honest-to-god legend (albeit an obscure one) mixed with honest-to-god history, so the overarching plot points, motivations, and Names (both significantly and unfortunately) ...are fixed. Character interactions, however, are not.

It's also looking to be rather long. I roughly define chapters as the necessary plot to produce and resolve one sex scene. I have two nearly finished, and I'm sitting around 10,000 words. And the story's just gotten started.
But, I'm in no particular hurry. Which is good, since of the options "good," "fast," and "cheap", one only ever gets to pick two.

 

[sr71plt]

I think you'll have more editorial interest shown when you finished the work. Editors don't normally come into the picture until there's something complete to look at. It's not a story until the arc is completed.

I don't really follow that first person would be a barrier to a good seduction scene. I actually gravitate to the first person for seduction, because it beomes more sensory and emotional in the first person.

If you're interested, you could send me one chapter of where you think that is a problem and I'd look at that one chapter for you--both for context and for technical issues.

You could PM me and I would give you an e-mail address to send a Word attachment to.

But it's perhaps enough for you to think of what you are writing into it now that's first-hand emotional and sensory, and you may find that you are able to get across that voice barrier yourself.