Fairy Tale-type fic

[scarlett_wolf_del]

I've had this idea in my head for a while now, but I just can't seem to really do it justice. Mainly because I keep seeing it as a PWP fic.

Basically an attractive early 20-something wood nymph has been with her late 20-something Piper for some years, but have never acted on their mutual attraction despite, enjoyably, spending every waking moment together (and have for at least five years). One moonlit spring night however that will change...

What do you think?

 

[Titaniaswhim]

I think it sounds great! Do you want help fleshing it out? PM me, I'd love to help! Or - discuss it here, and we can all help you sort your thoughts and get it written!

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

Awesome!

Their names would be Henry and Lily and they would've met when Lily was about 18. Naturally there was an instant attraction, but as they were supposed to concentrate more on the forrest, they kept their feelings to themselves.

Though a deep friendship still managed to form over time. So much so that within just a year (since spending so much alone time together) they were completely comfortable bathing under the waterfalls with one another. It was never anything sexual, but still seeing the other in their natural glory was enough to steal their breath.

There's more, but I figured that'd be enough for a start.

 

[Titaniaswhim]

Awesome!

Their names would be Henry and Lily and they would've met when Lily was about 18. Naturally there was an instant attraction, but as they were supposed to concentrate more on the forrest, they kept their feelings to themselves.

Though a deep friendship still managed to form over time. So much so that within just a year (since spending so much alone time together) they were completely comfortable bathing under the waterfalls with one another. It was never anything sexual, but still seeing the other in their natural glory was enough to steal their breath.

There's more, but I figured that'd be enough for a start.

See? I think you already have this story written in your head! Keep going!

If they like one another, and are mutually attracted, what kept them sex-free for a year? 'Supposed to concentrate more on the forest' - perhaps there's some deeper reason they're supposed to wait? Some sort of coming-of-age ritual that is followed? Or some sort of celibacy requirement?

Perhaps one of your characters is already promised to another?

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

I think it's more that they're not sure the other's attracted to them. Henry feels Lily only sees him as a good friend and Lily just isn't sure that he's really attracted to her. Fearing he sees her as a sister.

But I do like the idea of her being promised to another. I'm really trying to get this away from being another fluff piece and I think that's what it needs.

 

[SophieUK]

I think it's more that they're not sure the other's attracted to them. Henry feels Lily only sees him as a good friend and Lily just isn't sure that he's really attracted to her. Fearing he sees her as a sister.

But I do like the idea of her being promised to another. I'm really trying to get this away from being another fluff piece and I think that's what it needs.

hmm I think this has potential: its a theme I have explored in fantasies, but not in print (!!)
such good frieinds its almost brotherly/sisterly
she has lots of suitors: he thinks she's not attracted to him in 'that' way?

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

hmm I think this has potential: its a theme I have explored in fantasies, but not in print (!!)
such good frieinds its almost brotherly/sisterly
she has lots of suitors: he thinks she's not attracted to him in 'that' way?

Sounds good to me. But the reason she's considering the others, or just someone else in general is that they're both convinced that the other isn't attracted to them in "that" way. I have the beginning and the very end, it's just the rest that's driving me crazy.

Anway, I can see it being that finally one night, she finally breaks away from whomever else (every story like this needs a villain after all) one night and finds her way back to the forest. Back to Henry.

 

[only_more_so]

What if they really don't see each other "that way" until something happens?

Heck, since it's a fairy tale, perhaps a witch or something spelled them both so they wouldn't recognize their true love.

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

I really like that! Definitely, for a fairy tale it makes all the sense in the world.

 

[SophieUK]

My ideas (finally!)

What if they really don't see each other "that way" until something happens?

Heck, since it's a fairy tale, perhaps a witch or something spelled them both so they wouldn't recognize their true love.

Sorry its taken me so long to respond (I've been turning this over in my mind!)
Wondering what kept them realising their attraction? And what causes a change despite numerous situations (like the waterfall scenes you alluded to) where they had opportunities?

Ideas:
1) Its a fact of fairy life: she is 'special' and is being schooled for a special (fertility?) role in their forest (and he knows and respects that). Part of that schooling means that she is indoctrinated in the various 'ways' of her new life, and he can do is watch, and feel sad for his unrequited love.

2) The turning point is the grand ceremony when she takes her final step? The ceremony means spells and potions to bind her, heart and soul, to her new life. However, during the ceremony, the potions also endow her with clear vision of absolute 'truth' and, when their eyes meet, this makes her realise that Henry is the one true love for her, with dramatic consequences...

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

I love both ideas. They really do fit. Thanks for the help, all of you.

 

[Fantasies_only]

What the story is lacking is conflict.
A forbidden romance (Romeo and Juliet style) would play good in here, but it should have some kind of twist.

A villain is what's needed.
The natural enemy of wood nymphs is the wicked Satyr (alternate to the good natured Faun).
A good and evil twin love triangle would fit real well here.

Lastly we need a subplot with non essential characters.
A piper is usually a pixie (like Peter Pan) in this case.
Maybe this can be expanded upon.

It sounds like this story is more romance than erotica.
Frankly, I like the change.

 

[SophieUK]

What the story is lacking is conflict.
A forbidden romance (Romeo and Juliet style) would play good in here, but it should have some kind of twist.

A villain is what's needed.
The natural enemy of wood nymphs is the wicked Satyr (alternate to the good natured Faun).
A good and evil twin love triangle would fit real well here.

Lastly we need a subplot with non essential characters.
A piper is usually a pixie (like Peter Pan) in this case.
Maybe this can be expanded upon.

It sounds like this story is more romance than erotica.
Frankly, I like the change.

Hmm interesting.. I like the idea of the satyr being the other side of the triangle (yet to show his true hand?)
And I adore pixies.. so a subplot.. perhaps several of them (involved in the training?) actually being able to discern the attraction, but not able to do anything but talk (gossip?) about it?

romance? yes .. but I'm hoping we can 'spice' it up?

 

[Fantasies_only]

Hmm interesting.. I like the idea od the satyr being the other side of the traingle (yet to show his true hand?)
And I adore pixies.. so a subplot.. perhaps several of them (involved inthe training?) actually being able to discern the attraction, but not able to do anything but talk (gossip?) about it?

romance? yes .. but I'm hoping we can 'spice' it up?

Blackmail? Threats?
You could have something along those lines.
As a little comic relief, you can add a few faries.
Lesbian mermaids (without seashell bra) would be great too, after all, they loose their tail when on land.

 

[SophieUK]

Blackmail? Threats?
You could have something along those lines.
As a little comic relief, you can add a few faries.
Lesbian mermaids (without seashell bra) would be great too, after all, they loose their tail when on land.

I love my fairies too much to have them used for comic relief !!

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

See, this is exactly why I posted this here, THANK YOU for all your input!

Not sure where the mermaids would come into play when this mostly takes place in a forrest, but anything's possible. Evil twin? Not sure. But a villain, definitely yes.

I'm glad everyone can see that it is more of a romance, because that's what I write. "Hot and sweet" are typically the reviews I seem to get and they're some of my favorites to get. Even if I don't typically write for reviews.

 

[SophieUK]

Let me know

See, this is exactly why I posted this here, THANK YOU for all your input!

Not sure where the mermaids would come into play when this mostly takes place in a forrest, but anything's possible. Evil twin? Not sure. But a villain, definitely yes.

I'm glad everyone can see that it is more of a romance, because that's what I write. "Hot and sweet" are typically the reviews I seem to get and they're some of my favorites to get. Even if I don't typically write for reviews.

how you get on...

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

how you get on...

So much for my secret LOL! Seriously, my attitude is something along the lines of just because it's sweet and tender doesn't mean that it can't also be extremely erotic. After all, when two people are interested enough in each other, they're not exactly going to be shy and they're going to want to give all they can. Especially if they're enjoying what they're receiving.

 

[SophieUK]

So much for my secret LOL! Seriously, my attitude is something along the lines of just because it's sweet and tender doesn't mean that it can't also be extremely erotic. After all, when two people are interested enough in each other, they're not exactly going to be shy and they're going to want to give all they can. Especially if they're enjoying what they're receiving.

Exactly!
That's what I was getting at above: just because its romantic doesn't mean it can't be 'hot'... I think it will be all the 'hotter' if they're in love, and the unbridled passion gets going

 

[scarlett_wolf_del]

Exactly!
That's what I was getting at above: just because its romantic doesn't mean it can't be 'hot'... I think it will be all the 'hotter' if they're in love, and the unbridled passion gets going

Exactly what I was thinking because that's exactly what I write.