"Extreme" story...

[Guest]

Normally I don't like starting new threads about myself, but I have a question. I was wondering if anyone here has read my story at all and if they could give me some honest feedback on it. It's in the Extreme/Non consent section and is titled The Rape. I am wondering if anyone here likes this story theme, if I should write more like it, or if I should try something else. Also, I wrote the story in first person from the male point of view (and I am female for those of you who may not know me yet)... I am wondering if I did a good job capturing the male point of view or if I should stick to female? Please, any and all feedback either here or in e-mail would be appreciated. Thank you!

~Tiggs~
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[poohlive]

I think you did a good job.
I believe you caught more of the female, then the male, which although wasn't what you wanted to do, was something that helped the story along.
When she started liking the things he was doing, and things like that.
I believe you got the guy down. Horny... and witha hard on, how can anyone get that wrong?
In any erotic story the most difficult person to write about is the females...
you basically have three options.
1. she wants it
2. she doesn't want it, but then comes to like it
3. she doesn't want it, and doesn't like it, but it happens anyway.

with the guy, it's only one...
1. he wants it.

There are some cases where the guy is somewhat forced. But, those are very rare, for the most part, the guy does want it.

 

[Weird Harold]

http://www.allextremesex.com/storyxs/tr_n_793_h0.shtml

(A link for those who don't know where to look.)

A well written story, although not terribly compelling.

I didn't read it closely enough to figure out why it's not compelling. I think part of the lack is the rapist isn't 'hard' enough. He's got soft edges, more like he's role-playing than raping. The male viewpoint seems to be done well. The rapist mind-set lacks a bit of realism though.

The pulitzer prize is in no jeopardy from this story, but it's not bad at all.

 

[Samuari]

Tiggs, I hadn't read it till just now. It is not my fetish, so it is hard for me to get into it. But I think that Harold is right about the man having too many soft edges.

If you like this sort of thing, then you might spend some time doing sketchs of ruthless, hard mercenary types. It is a difficult thing for me to get into.

 

[Guest]

I appreciate that you read it Sammie, since you're not into this sort of thing. Thank you.

 

[forgetunome]

Good Job Tiggs...

It is a very good story! I enjoyed it! If I were to critique it at all I would say it moved to quickly from her not wanting it to wanting it but...then it wasn't a long story so...maybe not.

But, you definitely have talent!