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For quite some time, I’ve been reading I/T stories with the “Group Sex” tag. The hit rate for finding stories I enjoy seems higher for that tag than others. Literotica doesn’t provide any definition of its tags, but I consider “Group Sex” to be when at least two couples have sex in front of each other. I don’t consider threesomes “Group Sex” because they have very different social dynamics. Ditto for one guy-multiple women stories.
So I read the story Vegas Wedding, and I had an idea for a story. The story I had an idea for had little in common with “Vegas Wedding” other than four characters names, heights and descriptions. I sent the author of “Vegas Wedding” a PM asking permission to use his characters. He never replied. I changed the descriptions (but kept that Summer is “gorgeous”) and thought about changing the names. However, I don’t think there’s anything distinctive about names and eventually decided to keep them.
Vegas Wedding was published on 4/9/24. On 4/10, I sent TM the first scene of this story.
As for looks, Becky is supposed to look like a blond Sarah Michelle Gellar. Summer is supposed to look like a generic Playboy playmate.
This is a very complicated story and turned out quite a bit different than I originally envision, primarily because of feedback from my friend TM as he read my latest scene. Originally, Kevin was going to be Summer’s step-brother. TM said he thought it would be better if he was Summer’s brother. I wanted Kevin to haunted by the idea that he'd become a cheater like his dad who didn’t raise him, so I changed him to Summer’s half-brother.
On 4/16, I sent TM the sex scene at the end of Kevin and Becky’s first date. He wrote back:
I agreed that having Becky call herself “Big Sis” made more sense than “Mommy”. “Mommy” was actually kind of creepy. I did want Becky to have an excuse to be in charge during her sex scenes with Matt. #2 was harder for me to agree to. At this point, I envisioned the sex scenes to have switching every time. That would fit more of the “Group Sex” theme of the story. The final sex scene would be Matt coming in Summer and then coming in Becky. But after TM’s comment, I realized that there’d be the problem of having essentially the same sex scene back-to-back with the only difference being the girl Matt was fucking. After much sighing, I decided to agree with TM’s suggestion.
On 4/19, I sent TM the rewrite of the post-first date sex scene as well as
Once I had decided to make that change, I realized that opened other story edits to improve the story. I changed Matt’s discussion with Summer outside the restaurant to include Matt saying that if things had gone between Kevin and Becky as well as Summer had hoped, Kevin would cut her off. That made the make out scene much more dramatic with Summer making a move to make Kevin hers. Originally in that scene, Matt makes out with Becky during the movie while Kevin makes out with Summer. Once the movie is over, Matt makes out with Summer while Kevin makes out with Becky. Once the post-movie make out is done, Kevin and Summer go into her bedroom, and Kevin comes out and announces that Summer is sleeping with him that night. Becky is more rightfully pissed in the published version and more justified to “get even” by making out with Matt.
Another advantage of no longer swapping was that Saturday became the siblings night and Sunday became couples night. Each night then had a different feel whereas they would have been close to the same if I had followed my original plan. And I think more plausible.
So I read the story Vegas Wedding, and I had an idea for a story. The story I had an idea for had little in common with “Vegas Wedding” other than four characters names, heights and descriptions. I sent the author of “Vegas Wedding” a PM asking permission to use his characters. He never replied. I changed the descriptions (but kept that Summer is “gorgeous”) and thought about changing the names. However, I don’t think there’s anything distinctive about names and eventually decided to keep them.
Vegas Wedding was published on 4/9/24. On 4/10, I sent TM the first scene of this story.
As for looks, Becky is supposed to look like a blond Sarah Michelle Gellar. Summer is supposed to look like a generic Playboy playmate.
This is a very complicated story and turned out quite a bit different than I originally envision, primarily because of feedback from my friend TM as he read my latest scene. Originally, Kevin was going to be Summer’s step-brother. TM said he thought it would be better if he was Summer’s brother. I wanted Kevin to haunted by the idea that he'd become a cheater like his dad who didn’t raise him, so I changed him to Summer’s half-brother.
On 4/16, I sent TM the sex scene at the end of Kevin and Becky’s first date. He wrote back:
”TM” said:(1) I enjoyed Becky calling herself "Mommy" in the previous make out session, but feel like it stopped working for this bit. I understand that she's role-playing, but having Matt's big sister call herself "Mommy" feels.....a little jarring, like it doesn't quite fit with their circumstances. What if she simply called herself "Big Sis"? I mean, this is an I/T story, and the reader is already expecting I/T, and I don't quite understand why Becky is calling herself "Mommy" here.
(2) Having Becky stop making out with Matt here while Summer stops making out with Kevin, and then switching partners, feels seriously discordant and out of place now that things have finally ramped up. I don't know about you, but if I were finally getting hot and heavy with a girl after all that buildup, I wouldn't be super interested in switching. I'd want to keep going! I feel like you could eliminate the entire middle of the partner switch, simply having Kevin and Summer completely lose themselves in each other once they start making out, and then Kevin carries Summer to her bedroom, sheepishly and apologetically telling Becky that he's spending the night with Summer, and that they can catch up the next day. Becky and Matt are stunned, but since they're having such a good time with each other Becky suggests that Matt come to her room to tuck her in, and then things go from there. The whole point of things ramping up is that passion takes over and the guy and girl lose a bit of control and need to keep going. Sure, Summer and Becky had a plan to start out with their siblings and then switch, but hey, sometimes plans change. Kevin has a great thing going with Summer, and I don't see him wanting to give it up that evening. Maybe they had some wine or cocktails with dinner? And this is an I/T story, so your readers want the I/T to start up.
I agreed that having Becky call herself “Big Sis” made more sense than “Mommy”. “Mommy” was actually kind of creepy. I did want Becky to have an excuse to be in charge during her sex scenes with Matt. #2 was harder for me to agree to. At this point, I envisioned the sex scenes to have switching every time. That would fit more of the “Group Sex” theme of the story. The final sex scene would be Matt coming in Summer and then coming in Becky. But after TM’s comment, I realized that there’d be the problem of having essentially the same sex scene back-to-back with the only difference being the girl Matt was fucking. After much sighing, I decided to agree with TM’s suggestion.
On 4/19, I sent TM the rewrite of the post-first date sex scene as well as
Once I had decided to make that change, I realized that opened other story edits to improve the story. I changed Matt’s discussion with Summer outside the restaurant to include Matt saying that if things had gone between Kevin and Becky as well as Summer had hoped, Kevin would cut her off. That made the make out scene much more dramatic with Summer making a move to make Kevin hers. Originally in that scene, Matt makes out with Becky during the movie while Kevin makes out with Summer. Once the movie is over, Matt makes out with Summer while Kevin makes out with Becky. Once the post-movie make out is done, Kevin and Summer go into her bedroom, and Kevin comes out and announces that Summer is sleeping with him that night. Becky is more rightfully pissed in the published version and more justified to “get even” by making out with Matt.
Another advantage of no longer swapping was that Saturday became the siblings night and Sunday became couples night. Each night then had a different feel whereas they would have been close to the same if I had followed my original plan. And I think more plausible.
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