exercise

[wildsweetone]

Okey dokey, the exercise for this week is:

Write a piece that contains the word 'notch'.

Make it as long or as short as you want... Post it here if it's under the 750 word count minimum for a story, or if it's over, submit it and bring back a link.

 

[MathGirl]

Exercise

I'ma redneck trucker and I like to drink scotch,
Then I go home to my wife fer a piece of her notch,
I sez, "Git ta bed," she replies, "Sho 'nuff,"
I gotta gut fulla whiskey anna mouf fulla muff

Is that what you had in mind, WSO?

 

[Chicklet]

Re: Exercise

I'ma redneck trucker and I like to drink scotch,
Then I go home to my wife fer a piece of her notch,
I sez, "Git ta bed," she replies, "Sho 'nuff,"
I gotta gut fulla whiskey anna mouf fulla muff

Is that what you had in mind, WSO?

lmao

oh my god

lol

 

[wildsweetone]

Re: Exercise

I'ma redneck trucker and I like to drink scotch,
Then I go home to my wife fer a piece of her notch,
I sez, "Git ta bed," she replies, "Sho 'nuff,"
I gotta gut fulla whiskey anna mouf fulla muff

Is that what you had in mind, WSO?

lol do ya spit much MG

 

[wildsweetone]

Is anybody having a go at this one? Should I hunt out another exercise or just disappear for a while?

 

[MathGirl]

Gimme time

Oh, okay, WSO. I'll have another go at it. A work of art doesn't just happen, though. I'll need some time. Back in 20 minutes.

 

[MathGirl]

Working under pressure

Ima drivin' ma truck an' ascratchin my crotch,
Gonna turn ma CB radio up a notch,
Soon I'll be with ma sweetie an' we'll both chew snuff,
I'll have a gut fulla whiskey anna mouf fulla muff.

I been adrivin' all night an' ma butt is sore,
I gotta bad case of piles, an' I'ma feelin' poor,
Gotta notch in ma pecker, but I'm big an' tough,
I needa gut fulla whiskey anna mouf fulla muff.

Well, I got circumcised, but the job was a botch,
Was supposed ta git a trim, but I got me a notch,
Now I'ma settin' here bawlin' an' feelin' rough,
I needa gut fulla whiskey anna mouf fulla muff.

 

[SlaveMasterUK]

First Notch

You know I can't resist your excercises, WSO! Here's a little short just for this thread:
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Damn, my head hurts. I must have been... Yes, I was drinking last night. Don't know what I was drinking, mouth tastes like salt. My head hurts.

What time is it? Eleven fifteen. Still early. That's good, and at it's warm too. Get this blanket off, I'm burning up. My head hurts.

Shit, what's this? Blood? I must have... No, it's... What!? My head hurts. Gonna get me a paracetamol just as soon as I get downstairs. In a minute. Damn I'm cold, where's that blanket?

So if it ain't blood, what's this red stuff? Lipstick? Did I..? I remember the Brasshouse, I remember Torches Bar... Did we get to..? Shit! I did!

Yes, I remember her now - shit how could I even forget? So beautiful, so sensual, the way she was dancing in front of me. She was so real when I touched her, that first contact with new skin. It must have been so long since I touched anyone.

Damn why does everything have to be so fuzzy? My head hurts! Where is she anyway? My pillow smells of vodka, her lipstick is on my blanket; come on man you're too mature to even think about sniffing your fingers. So where is she now?

Downstairs. Pour a glass of water, find those damned paracetamols. My head hurts. She's not here either; no note, no phone number. My keys are on the mat - she must have let herself out.

Oh well. Sinking heart now. Just like a dream I guess, but real. A few hours of closeness, of belonging, then gone forever from everywhere but my memory. Like a dream but real. Come on man, don't get upset, you told yourself yesterday you're happier this way.

I guess this is my first notch. My head hurts.

----
dedicated to the Sunday morning loneliness

Ax

 

[wildsweetone]

my own opinion for what it's worth...

Oh Ax! Be strong dear! It'll all come right in the end... so they say. Glad you posted.

notes:

-There are four 'must have' phrases and I only noticed them when I read 'It must have been so long since I touched anyone.' I think it might read easier if that sentence were written differently. 'It had been so long since I touched anyone.' But I'm not sure... It still seems strange.

-Does vodka smell? Sorry I don't know, it's a long time since I had any. (poor me! lol)

-'...sniffing your fingers.' Very interesting habit this one, and one that is probably underused in Litland.


-first notch. Okay I need clarification on this. Is this your first notch because it's the first sexual encounter that you're determined not to care about?

I can see next time I'm going to have to dream up something that really will be a challenge for you. You seem to be able to write these exercises out with your eyes closed!

 

[MathGirl]

Short, short story

I kiked down the dor and cummed in her notche

 

[wildsweetone]

Re: Short, short story

I kiked down the dor and cummed in her notche

You forgot the period.

 

[MathGirl]

Re: Re: Short, short story

You forgot the period.

period.

 

[SlaveMasterUK]

Re: Short, short story

I kiked down the dor and cummed in her notche

where did you get your sense of humour? It looks just like MINE!

ax

 

[SlaveMasterUK]

Re: my own opinion for what it's worth...

Originally posted by wildsweetone Oh Ax! Be strong dear! It'll all come right in the end... so they say. Glad you posted.

It's not a true story, but in similar circumstances, part of me is always deeply upset when somebody shows they're only interested in me for a short time. But don't worry, it wasn't cry for help

notes:

-There are four 'must have' phrases and I only noticed them when I read 'It must have been so long since I touched anyone.' I think it might read easier if that sentence were written differently. 'It had been so long since I touched anyone.' But I'm not sure... It still seems strange.

Point conceded. In my defence, I didn't re-read it - I just typed it in quick & hit post (this busy life I lead...)

-Does vodka smell? Sorry I don't know, it's a long time since I had any. (poor me! lol)

Yes it does... Brandy too. Woke up smelling of it this afternoon...

-'...sniffing your fingers.' Very interesting habit this one, and one that is probably underused in Litland.

It just cummed into my mind right as I was about to hit post. Memories of my own adolescence, maybe.

-first notch. Okay I need clarification on this. Is this your first notch because it's the first sexual encounter that you're determined not to care about?

After I posted, I wondered if this was a term that might not be familiar in the US, but yeah you got it right. It means it'll be the first mark on the character's proverbial bedpost - sex for the sake of sex, really. And it's the character's way of trying to convince himself that he doesn't care.

I can see next time I'm going to have to dream up something that really will be a challenge for you. You seem to be able to write these exercises out with your eyes closed!

Keep 'em comin! I'm only trying to prove something to myself.

ax

 

[wildsweetone]

i'm learning at the same time dear.

okay here's mine. i've submitted it as a poem, slightly different layout is all. be warned, it's another odd one.

***

Notch

They grabbed him after nightfall. No one heard sounds. Farm dogs lay dead, their throats slit, mouths open silently barking. Death had come with speed.

He must have struggled; two kitchen chairs lay overturned, glass shards and pooled milk leaked between floorboards.

She found her lover swinging inside an old barn out back. Rope squeaking, his body pendulous from the wind howling through open rotten doors.

One denim pocket held recorded details, a fourth notch scratched on wood.

(78 words, 8 sentences, no repititions.)

 

[MathGirl]

Wahoo

Notch

Dear WSO,
That little story certainly put a spring in my step and a song in my heart.
MG

 

[wildsweetone]

MG, have you asked for help lately? Ever?

 

[MathGirl]

Huh?

MG, have you asked for help lately? Ever?

WSO,
Why on earth would you suggest that I might need help?

Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha
MG

Ps. Hahahahahahahahaha