Erotic Horror

[R. Richard]

I have submitted an Erotic Horror story titled "Night Goblin." My intention was to write a really scary story. Admittedly, there is a lot more horror than erotic in the story. However, I think that it is worthy of more than the bombing it is getting. Is it really that bad authors?

 

[Colleen Thomas]

A link would be helpful

I have an erotic horror up for the halloween contest. It's not doing too well, but I expect that. My erotic horor tends to be neither erotic enough or horrific enough

-Colly

p.s. Pm Lou Lou, she's a whiz with erotic horror and can give you a solid opinion on it

 

[Guest]

I have submitted an Erotic Horror story titled "Night Goblin." My intention was to write a really scary story. Admittedly, there is a lot more horror than erotic in the story. However, I think that it is worthy of more than the bombing it is getting. Is it really that bad authors?

Don't worry, erotic horror never does very well. It's an aqcuired taste thing and while I absolutely love it, some people have no idea what to expect (despite the disclaimer).

I'm always quite surprised that my two here have never achieved the coveted H. Not that I am at all bothered about voting,

If you like it and are pleased with it, fuck 'em. That's my attitude, anyway.

Lou

 

[Guest]

A link would be helpful

I have an erotic horror up for the halloween contest. It's not doing too well, but I expect that. My erotic horor tends to be neither erotic enough or horrific enough

-Colly

Bollocks! Do you think I would have an erotic horror story of yours on my site if I didn't think it was fantabulous???



RRichard, I'll give it a read when I can. I owe lots of others reads, too. So slack...

Lou

 

[neonlyte]

RR
I've got two posted - one is for Halloween.

As Lou says the readership for EH is very low, hence voting will be low. Both my EH stories have my highest average 'score', but one lanquishes on six votes after 3 months, I don't think anyone on AH has read it, at least I've had no feedback.

Tha Halloween entry has fifteen votes, very low for any of my stories, particularly given it is a competition entry.

I will take a look and send you feedback.

 

[R. Richard]

I have received several replies.

One frequent theme in the replies has been that I should develop the character to a greater extent. I would politely disagree. The character is a really bad sociopath. The development of such a character is nearly impossible. Also, a look into the mind of such a person would be useless to the average Literotica citizen as the basis for the thoughts of such a person are contrary to almost everything the average person has been taught and has developed as a member of society. The divergence is so extreme that even people who have studied psychiatry would be unable to really grasp the throught processes of the protagonist. I deliberately left the character development out, as such character development would have been worse than useless. Also, I feel that the omission makes the story even scarier.

I apologise for forgetting to include a link to the story. I now include the link.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=165927

I am still soliciting analysis. TIA.

By the way, I have had to deal with several people such as the protagonist in my professional life. I do have some insight into the mind of the protagonist. The insight is not pleasant and would not be understood by the average reader.

 

[Sabledrake]

It's been my experience, too, that the Erotic Horror category doesn't get great votes. Personally, I like the grittier, darker, nastier stories (ask Lou; she knows I'm a big slavering Richard Laymon fan).

But on here, I've found, stories that make the average Lit reader uncomfortable just don't do well, no matter how skillfully they're written. My Incest category tales, for example, often don't get very high votes, and I'm guessing this is because all the characters are depicted as either starting off crazy or quickly becoming so. That doesn't seem to appeal to the folks who want some validation of their incestuous fantasies by seeing it treated as "okay."

The audience for Erotic Horror is going to be much more limited, despite the success of series such as the Hot Blood books. Most of the readers on here seem to be looking for something sexy and safe, something that isn't going to challenge either their intellect or their comfort zones. And horror, erotic or not, is all about challenging those things.

So, chin up and don't be discouraged! I read your story, R., and agree with you that it was much more horror than erotic ... the character was extremely visceral and creepy and I wanted the story to be longer

Sabledrake

 

[patrick1]

Hi RR

I feel what your story lacks is significant detail. This is an obsession of mine though so I may be wrong. The phrase is from the literary novelist Nadine Gordimer. But I feel it matters in all genres. There are just moments of observation that would make it all feel richer. A desription of a moment when Kaylene dies. What precisely it is about 'sexy' that he likes - 'sexy' is just so abstract, it doesn't sound believable, not like ''them stockings that end halfway up their thighs so you can just see the pink when they bend over" would sound - to quote an example. At the moment your story sounds a little like a summary of a story rather than the story itself. The detail is what will make it smell alive. Well, that's how I see it.

Patrick

 

[Guest]

RR: Patrick gives very good advice above. I've read your story and your posts here and hope only to be frank and honest. I did not find your story scary at all. In fact it isn't a real story for me (structurally). It's like a brief one-sided barroom 'conversation' with a nut (and as uninteresting, however wacky); one just wants to walk away.

It may be 'real' to you, and to the narrator, but it's too brief and unauthoritative, i.e., you may know what a psychopathic mind is but I don't, and it does not ring true in the writing (the telling, vs. the showing). There is really nothing of interest there (the details Patrick speaks of). The 10 inches is such a cliche it made me laugh. Needless to say, I found nothing erotic, or even smutty, in the piece.

I honestly don't know what else to say as there is so little to work with in trying to give you any real criticism.

Perdita

 

[doormouse]

I fucking love erotic horror.

I vote on all the suckers.. good or bad. Heh have to encourage them somehow.

I'll have a read when I get time RR.