Educating Christopher

[phantome71]

Please check out my other story, "Educating Christopher", in the mature section.Let me know whadyer think?
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=185549

 

[msboy8]

Please check out my other story, "Educating Christopher", in the mature section.Let me know whadyer think?
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=185549

I R.V.'d on your story. Pretty good, but it didn't grab me and I was distracted by a couple of things.

1. He seemed to have accepted being called a slave rather easily. No real thought about the very important descision.

2. I would suggest trying an editor, the Lit. Deni-gods seem to be over worked and missed this:

"Are slaves allowed to be equal he asked."

"Favourite slaves are was her reply."

It really easy to get caught up writing the story and make simple mistakes like this. I had to go to an editor to build my writing skills up, plus they catch my simple mistakes. Keep writing.