Mamimi
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- Nov 30, 2011
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My story has a little over 3,000 words, I'd categorize it as "reluctance", and it's my first erotic story I've ever attempted to share with anyone - I'm not really familiar with how these things work since I am a bit of a newcomer to the game, but I'm really excited to share my story with other people.
The story is called "Dreams Do Come True", and yes, I realize it's a bit corny. Basically a young woman has a sexual dream, only it wasn't actually a dream and her fantasy lover pays her a visit one stormy night. It's not really meant to have much character development, I wanted to have the reader be able to become either character, you know? Since it was pretty short, I figured it was best that way. I submitted it and it was rejected because of paragraphing reasons,
"Was the story not broken into appropriately sized paragraphs? Please break up your dialogue. The convention is one speaker per paragraph, so whenever someone new says something, start a new a paragraph. The essay "How to Make Characters Talk" in our Writer's Resources section has more information on the paragraph formatting of dialogue if you have further questions. " to quote the reason.
I actually did read the section that suggested breaking it up more because of the difference between reading a book and reading on a screen and thought I'd done enough of it, but I went ahead and split it up even further after their note, so I hope you'll read my story and edit it for me!
Thanks you all for your time, I really do appreciate it
The story is called "Dreams Do Come True", and yes, I realize it's a bit corny. Basically a young woman has a sexual dream, only it wasn't actually a dream and her fantasy lover pays her a visit one stormy night. It's not really meant to have much character development, I wanted to have the reader be able to become either character, you know? Since it was pretty short, I figured it was best that way. I submitted it and it was rejected because of paragraphing reasons,
"Was the story not broken into appropriately sized paragraphs? Please break up your dialogue. The convention is one speaker per paragraph, so whenever someone new says something, start a new a paragraph. The essay "How to Make Characters Talk" in our Writer's Resources section has more information on the paragraph formatting of dialogue if you have further questions. " to quote the reason.
I actually did read the section that suggested breaking it up more because of the difference between reading a book and reading on a screen and thought I'd done enough of it, but I went ahead and split it up even further after their note, so I hope you'll read my story and edit it for me!
Thanks you all for your time, I really do appreciate it
