Editor Request NC/R BDSM E/V

[NoCorrelation]

Hi boys and girls,

Seeing as how the good friend I normally subject to my writing is taking a well deserved holiday, I could do with an editor.

The story is the second part of this story, so it would be great if you liked or knew the story, but I'm really not expecting it. Part one was mild BDSM and NC/R in that the heroine is tricked into the situation by her master. It's currently got 4.3 stars & 100 votes from 17k views.
http://www.literotica.com/s/sarahs-birthday-surprise-ch-01

Second part is the taxi ride in and has forced orgasm, some fantasy recollection, mild exhibitionism, and a little punishment. Still pretty light stuff IMO but YMMV.

I'm very British and the language, places, habits, etc all probably reflect that, of it matters to you.

I'm looking for someone to make sure it makes sense and correct any obvious contradictions or massive UK/US language issues. Suggestions are welcomed but not essential.

Not sure of word count (I'm at work) but it's probably 2.5-3 pages long here or 12 pages in Word.

That probably covers everything. Ask if not.

Thanks in advance.

 

[Beth87]

PM me, if you're still looking

 

[NoCorrelation]

Hi Beth87 - thanks for the offer! I got an offsite offer that I took up, but if it's okay with you, I might drop you a PM when (if) the next part is written.

It's live. And it's currently got a scary high score (even though there are less than a dozen votes)

http://www.literotica.com/s/sarahs-birthday-surprise-ch-02