editor needed: loving wives/romance; homeless man hurts marriage

[ribnitin]

Hi,
I've written an 8500 word story which could fit in either Loving Wives or Romance. It's about a couple that helps out a homeless man, and whose marriage is destroyed as a consequence.
The story is in pretty good shape. I catch almost everything doing my own proof-reading, but I cannot judge how well my own words read. I would like an editor to tell me how the story reads, and provide suggestions to improve that.
https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=4049602&page=submissions
Kindly respond by private message, or email through my member contact page: https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=4049602&page=contact
Thanks.

 

[psiberzerker]

I can't see it there, but if you could cut, and paste it to email

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I can take a look. It's right up my alley, because I'm currently Rentless, have been homeless most of my life, and also play "The other man" for couples as a living.

Gmail is probably better for a story this size, than private messages. I do most of my Drafts there, anyway.