Editor needed for an indian based story - I'm.weak in English

[Tharkibudda]

I wrote this long time ago and want to publish in literotica.

Its a 5 part story of an indian descent to cheating on her husband..

My English is weak as it's not my first language. Please let me know if you can help edit my story.

 

[CiaoSteve]

How long is your story?

 

[Emirus]

I’ve just read the first 14 paragraphs of ‘Peeping Tom’, the first of the two stories you’ve had published so far, and think you do yourself an injustice in saying your English is weak. These are just the first corrections springing to mind.

1. Saima was having a tough time getting her husband, Riaz, to orgasm.

2. it was rare the house

3. usually many more. Pleasuring herself

4. apart from her. But she could

5. retrieved the lamp from her bedside table

6. hit with the vase whoever was inside.

(5 & 6. Was it a lamp or a vase? Attention to detail!

7. at the inhabitant, Abdul

8. see her too. His face

9. the wall. She was sure

10. been there for. It was quite

There are other changes an editor could suggest but, in the main, your writing flows well. I’ve deliberately highlighted those simple mistakes because you commonly see ones like them, in stories on this website, made by writers for whom English is their native language.

By my calculation your first two stories are approximately 5000 and 3000 words. It’s important when asking for an editor you give a reasonable amount of information. Be specific as to how many words in the story/chapters(s) and also give a brief idea of the storyline.