Do you like this one? (Lesbian)

[LaRascasse]

Hi,

I'd appreciate some feedback on this lesbian story of mine which came up earlier this month. Lesbian is a new category for me, so there are mistakes I could have made that I'm not even aware of. I'm actually writing a sequel to this story at the moment.

Constructive feedback is welcome on any aspect of the story you deem fit - plot, pace, characters, setting, or even the all-important sex.

Thanks

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Reddish brown hair color is called AUBURN.

 

[lovecraft68]

First off as always well written.

As for what people think? Have you checked your score? Looks like it went over pretty damn well.

In general I liked it, but the premise was well.....

Don't take this the wrong way, because seeing its what you strive for, you should take it as a compliment

You can really fuck up a wet dream.