Ditto on the "trolling for feedback"

[shanier]

I just had this story put up,
Taken (non-consent)

and while I like it, I'm hoping to improve it.

Also, I'm wondering if it's worth going on with it.

any help would be appreciated...

 

[ladyphoenix]

Hmmm

Interesting. I liked it. The first person point of view was a little odd....I mean, she can't know what he sees when he looks at her (the tears and drops of blood) so that would have been better either from his POV or from a narrator's. But I like the twist on an old theme. Very nice. I'd read part 2.