Descriptive Stories!

[Lil-Brandi]

Hello Everyone,

I am curious as a relatively new author to erotica if my style of writing appeals to the readers. One of my stories "A Night Out" is a prime example that leads to my question. I have always written with many details and usually build a foundation to my stories, before jumping right to the major source of excitement. I have read some stories that take the reader directly to the sexual destination, without taking them on a journey through different scenarios. Please, if anyone has read my stories, could you let me know if my style is proper or if I should adjust. I only ask this, because I as a reader, enjoy a story that takes a little bit of time to build to the final climax...no pun intended!!! I look forward to hearing some input on this matter..Thank you for your time,

Hugs and kisses, Lil-Brandi

[Edited by Lil-Brandi on 11-11-2000 at 11:23 AM]

 

[Ambrosious]

I also write detecteve stories and they are set in 1940's London with the main character named Bo Diddly.

Oh, you said DESCRIPTIVE stories. Sorry. Yes, I have read your stories and yes this is my favorite style of writing as well. Stories should be built, and tension should be tense. I also write in this stlye and the one story that I went straight to the action, I didn't like. I got some good feedback on that story, it just isn't my favorite. Keep up the good work.

 

[talk2024]

I'll have to go read your story but I think it's pretty safe to assume that if you write something that genuinely turns you on, others will be turned on, too.
Besides, jumping right into the action can get tedious after a while... the real challenge is to set a mood and keep a style fresh.
Keep at it and remember that you can't please everyone, so at least please yourself.

 

[talk2024]

I'll have to go read your story but I think it's pretty safe to assume that if you write something that genuinely turns you on, others will be turned on, too.
Besides, jumping right into the action can get tedious after a while... the real challenge is to set a mood and keep a style fresh.
Keep at it and remember that you can't please everyone, so at least please yourself.

 

[ANiceGuy]

direct connect lint to Lil brandi Stories

http://www.literotica.com/storyxs/authpages/581_auth.shtml

 

[Otzchiim]

The answer is, as usual, yes and no. I like background and characters myself. But if your intent is to sell fiction to, say, the men's magazines, you may want to avoid such things. At least I was always told my things are too plot-heavy. But some people have liked them, or so they tell me.
There are of course the literary porn-mags, where they only buy stories about unpleasant people who are compelled toward sexual acts which they get no pleasure from.

 

[KillerMuffin]

I like descriptive stories with a good plot to them. It makes it a real story rather than a locker room tale of a quick (or slow) fucking. Since I don't partake of men's magazines and don't intend to sell to men's magazines, this is okay for me to write.

When it comes to physically describing a character, I am the world's worst at it. I don't think I've actually gotten around to doing it yet. I give no pertinent details, I leave it to the reader. I don't think I've ever given a character's hair or eye color other than vague words like dark, shiny, cropped, long, or what have you.

I read the story (thanks for the link ANG!), and thought about what I didn't like about the descriptive elements.

It was in first person and the way she described herself was off-putting. It made me like her just that much less. It's hard to give details like that in first person because people don't naturally think that way, and you can't say what other people think. The other thing was the lack of feeling in character development. The character was well developed, but the lack of feelings in her gave her a cold calculating feel, something which made me like her even less.

I felt like the story was too rushed, I'd wished it lasted longer, had been more drawn out and, oh whats a good word, meatier. Particularly the second part when she and her friend did it for the first time. It was very hot, very well written in detail, but it seemed to me that the arousal factor was missing. Moreover, I think it should have been it's own story, it was something I would have wanted to read more of and to get more into.

Undoubtedly, however, it's a popular story on the site, it is a nicely written account of interesting sex. Other than some teethgritting only a grammarhound would notice errors, I thought it was rather good.

 

[wild_jay]

Lil-Brandi, I thoroughly enjoyed your story, A Night Out. I liked the way you built the story, set the mood, and the sex was hot. My only comment on your style might be to vary the length of your paragraphs so you can vary the pace of the story and make it an easier read. Sometimes dialog can help do this effectively.

Good luck and I look forward to reading your future submissions.

 

[ANiceGuy]

I know who's stories I'm going to....

As soon as I can get WalMurt to start the one per hour truck runs of Puff's tissues I'm going to start a Lil Brandi marathon story reading sexxion!!! hehehe

 

[Wil_E_Harden]

LOVE description!

Hey, I thought the story was at least a three-and-a-half hardon rating!

Description is good, and the harder and more direct it is, the better I have found women like the story. Guys just tend to create scenes and say "then I fucked her hard up the ass while the slut scremaed for mercy." Even in such situations, men tend to avoid being graphically descriptive, perhaps because in fact it sometimes embarrasses them so say such things.

Thanks to women's comments, my stories have become MUCH more graphic and descriptive. Here's one of my latest "Kimmy" yarns:

http://www.literotica.com/storyxs/stories/wwkcfbr_e_1507_j0.shtml


It is FULL of intimate detail. I'd like to know if you or the others here think the details are too extensive!

Keep me up with your stories, milady!

 

[Lil-Brandi]

Thank you!

Just a thank you for all the great replies I received on my original post. The information, advice, suggestions and compliments were very useful and I appreciated all of them!