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[coreyc]

I am new to writing and working on my first story which is quickly turn into a novella or more. It's going to be a slow burn story.

What I was hoping to get, is some feedback from readers in regards what they like when writing the sex sense.
Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night long"?
or Are you looking for a page long description of eating a pussy.
How many sex senses in a 25 page story is too much or not enough?
The one thing in a love story that makes it?
The one thing in a love story that breaks it?

Any other feedback is welcome as will be when I post the first of I hope many.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

I am new to writing and working on my first story which is quickly turn into a novella or more. It's going to be a slow burn story.

What I was hoping to get, is some feedback from readers in regards what they like when writing the sex sense.
Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night long"?
or Are you looking for a page long description of eating a pussy.
How many sex senses in a 25 page story is too much or not enough?
The one thing in a love story that makes it?
The one thing in a love story that breaks it?

Any other feedback is welcome as will be when I post the first of I hope many.

My best suggestion is to go to the category you want to write in and read, read, read...

 

[AlinaX]

Nothing sweeter than a virginia.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

Welcome.

As you note, Tab-A-into-Slot-B is a trap. So, when writing about it:

How does it feel? Explain that.
What does it make either or both feel like emotionally?
What makes this one particular bit of coitus better than all the rest?
Is there something humorous or unusual going on?
What do they taste like? Ditto smell, feel, etc - use all five senses.

Those’ll do for starters.

 

[AlinaX]

Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night ...

Honestly, no one wants this, even aside from it sounding like her virginia is a safety deposit box.

The goal of erotic literature is to seduce the reader into wanting to be there, part of the action. Excite the senses, be teasing and be brutal. Be poetic and be vulgar.

 

[CockSparrow]

Personally, I think that giving a sex organ a name (like Virginia) is a bit too cute - unless, of course, it's intended for comic effect.

Good luck.

 

[ElectricBlue]

I am new to writing and working on my first story which is quickly turn into a novella or more. It's going to be a slow burn story.

My recommendation to every new writer, especially if they've not written much before, or never written erotica before, is to start small. Start with six or ten short pieces, two characters, simple plots, simple stories. 4k - 7k words (one or two Lit pages).

Do this to get the technical stuff of writing nailed - grammar, punctuation, tenses, formatting. The nuts and bolts of writing. Also, to learn your style, how you write best, what you write best.

That is, do an apprenticeship first.

When you know yourself as a writer, that's when you should take on your first big story, and do it justice. If you attempt it too early, you probably won't do it justice, because you won't be a good enough writer, not yet.

All the questions you ask are good ones, but you learn the answers best yourself if you get to them one by one, and find your own answers. For every question, there's a yes, there's a no, but if you ask us, they're our yeses and noes, not yours.

The very fact that you're asking these questions suggests you don't know yet, so write less ambitious stories to find out. Walk before you run, and a year or so later, that's when you start to fly.

 

[Red_Herring4]

Nothing sweeter than a virginia.

Almost Heaven, sweet virginia ...

 

[ElectricBlue]

Honestly, no one wants this, even aside from it sounding like her virginia is a safety deposit box.

The goal of erotic literature is to seduce the reader into wanting to be there, part of the action. Excite the senses, be teasing and be brutal. Be poetic and be vulgar.

I didn't notice the typo, the Freudian slip (whatever it was), but that's brilliant. We should update the Christmas comp to be Yes, Virginia stories

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Welcome.

As you note, Tab-A-into-Slot-B is a trap. So, when writing about it:

How does it feel? Explain that.
What does make either or both feel like emotionally?
What makes this one particular bit of coitus better than all the rest?
Is there something humorous or unusual going on?
What do they taste like? Ditto smell, feel, etc - use all five senses.

Those’ll do for starters.

I agree with all of this. Make your sex scene special in some way.

However, look at all the thousands of tab-A into slot-Bs out there that score 4.7!

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Almost Heaven, sweet virginia ...

What about West Virginia? :0

 

[AlinaX]

Needs a bit of deforestation.

 

[rthnck]

This is literotica. Many readers are here for the sex scenes exclusively and scroll through the rest of the narrative like they were fast-forwarding through a porn video. The discerning readers that enjoy the setup, the surrounding dialogue, and the overall narrative are still invested in the sex scenes and I believe they will be sorely disappointed to be invested in a story, and then have the scene fly by in a "penis in virginia" second. Vaginas and Penises deserve a lot of love in a story and I think readers appreciate when you immerse them in the story as much as possible with visual imagery, sensations, smells, sounds, and taste. The more senses are engaged, the deeper the immersion. At least that's how I view erotic stories.

¯\_(ツ)_/¯​

 

[EmilyMiller]

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There are two approaches here:

1. Write what you think your readers will like (though it can be hard to guess what people in a given category really want)
2. Write what you want

I write stuff that arouses me. I assume that means that it arouses at least 0.1% of other people.

What arouses me is is kinda broad. Sweet lesbian love stories culminating in gentle sapphic sex. Women being restrained and gang banged. She-demons drinking vampire cum out of their angel girlfriend’s ass. Oh, and octopuses. Lots of octopuses.

My descriptions range as well. From clinically meticulous in their details, to a focus on emotions and an impressionistic painting of actual acts.

I really don’t think that there is one answer.

Write the sex that fits with your story.

ChatMLE

 

[AlinaX]

Sudden image in my mind: I read my story to an audience of a thousand, and this one woman in the third row had a full harry-met-sally orgasm when I reached the climax.

 

[StillStunned]

Sudden image in my mind: I read my story to an audience of a thousand, and this one woman in the third row had a full harry-met-sally orgasm when I reached the climax.

Presumably half the men had already finished and were asleep by then.

 

[BobbyBrandt]

My recommendation to every new writer, especially if they've not written much before, or never written erotica before, is to start small. Start with six or ten short pieces, two characters, simple plots, simple stories. 4k - 7k words (one or two Lit pages).

Do this to get the technical stuff of writing nailed - grammar, punctuation, tenses, formatting. The nuts and bolts of writing. Also, to learn your style, how you write best, what you write best.

That is, do an apprenticeship first.

When you know yourself as a writer, that's when you should take on your first big story, and do it justice. If you attempt it too early, you probably won't do it justice, because you won't be a good enough writer, not yet.

All the questions you ask are good ones, but you learn the answers best yourself if you get to them one by one, and find your own answers. For every question, there's a yes, there's a no, but if you ask us, they're our yeses and noes, not yours.

The very fact that you're asking these questions suggests you don't know yet, so write less ambitious stories to find out. Walk before you run, and a year or so later, that's when you start to fly.

I would never contradict @ElectricBlue's advice. However, I will offer an alternative for you:

IF you have already written a longer story and feel confident in it, don't hesitate to offer it to readers. My very first story here is posted in Novels/Novellas, is 27 pages long on this site (94K words), was a readers choice award winner, and still attracts a lot of views each day after ten years.

The other alternative advice I will offer involves sexual content. It simply isn't a requirement for a good story to be successful here as long as it is placed in the correct categories to meet reader expectations. (Novels/Novellas is one of those categories) There are thousands of stories here with absolutely no sexual content that remain very popular. There are also "degrees"of sexual content and how graphically described these are. The majority of my longer stories contain nothing more than speculative erotica, where the sexual events are teased to the reader and they are left to fill in the blanks using their own imagination. This approach work particularly well with romance themed stories.

The last piece of advice that I will throw out to you is, regardless of the length, always finish a story before posting any part of it. The patience this takes will pay dividends by allowing you to maintain total control over your story until the end. Good luck.

 

[AlinaX]

Nah, but they descended on that poor woman like a crowd of horny zombies, and her screams haunt me to this day.

 

[alohadave]

This is literotica. Many readers are here for the sex scenes exclusively and scroll through the rest of the narrative like they were fast-forwarding through a porn video.

There are times where that I exactly what I want from a story and no matter how good the rest of it is, I'm looking to get off.

 

[Cagivagurl]

I am new to writing and working on my first story which is quickly turn into a novella or more. It's going to be a slow burn story.

What I was hoping to get, is some feedback from readers in regards what they like when writing the sex sense.
Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night long"?
or Are you looking for a page long description of eating a pussy.
How many sex senses in a 25 page story is too much or not enough?
The one thing in a love story that makes it?
The one thing in a love story that breaks it?

Any other feedback is welcome as will be when I post the first of I hope many.

Hi,
welcome to the portals of somewhere.

Sex scenes... I think after you've written 10... It's all over. You're as sick of seeing then, let alone writing them.
There's only so many ways to describe the physical act...
When I read, I skim over the sex scenes. They're not why I'm reading. I want to read about the human connection, emotions, anger, love, adoration. hate.
I need to see all of those emotions ri[pped open and exposed. If your main characters are head over heels in love. Explain why... What is it about the other person that attracted them in the first place.
I want to fall into your story, feel everything the characters feel.
Love... heartbreak, horror, lust, desire.
I don't want to read this went there, that fitted in there. I did this or that. Give me something I can feel...

I'm not an experienced or well versed writer.
These are only the opinions of me personally. Others will say different things.
You will never be short of advice here. Take the bits that fit for you and throw the rest away.

Cagivagurl

 

[onehitwanda]

Nothing sweeter than a virginia.

except for Sweet Home Alabama.

 

[Rob_Royale]

What I was hoping to get, is some feedback from readers in regards what they like when writing the sex sense.
Are you looking for "They kissed, and then put his penis in her virginia, it felt good. They did it all night long"?
or Are you looking for a page long description of eating a pussy.
How many sex senses in a 25 page story is too much or not enough?

A happy medium is the goal here, IMO.
Sex scenes should flow with the story, not be forced into it, and like any part of the story, it should drive the narrative forward. Trust me, as you edit, you will figure this out pretty quickly.

 

[Bamagan]

except for Sweet Home Alabama.

As a sometime resident of Alabama, I must tell you this is false. For evidence, I submit to board the term 'Alabama hot pocket.'

 

[AlinaX]

except for Sweet Home Alabama.

So, in summary, he locked his penis securely in her virginia then watched a real man kiss her alabama?

 

[ElectricBlue]

As a sometime resident of Alabama, I must tell you this is false. For evidence, I submit to board the term 'Alabama hot pocket.'

I'm a lazy Australian. What's that all about?