Describing a Romantic/Sexual Scene

[Alexandra_CD]

I've written a story for the lit, and I can't decide if what I've written is just too boring and, well, technical, in its description of the encounter between the characters. I just can't evaluate the level of heat, because of the work that went into crafting the words.

I don't even know if that makes sense. Basically, I don't know if the sex works or not. Do other authors have the same problem with not being able to react sensually to their own material, and how do you overcome this?

Here's a link to the story in question culled from another thread. Thanks in advance for any replies.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Hasn't this story been on here before? Seems to me I read the same story like a year ago.

Anyhow, I'm afraid I'm no judge of TV stuff whatsoever. You'd probably need someonme who was into the lifestyle.

---dr.M.