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[craigbjonesy2j]

The other week i was out in my local nightclub with some friends, when i noticed my dads girlfriends daghter, she aint lovly but she tried getting off with me so i had this idea for a story.

She gets really drunk in this nightclub and i offer to take her home (to my dads house) when we go in i find that no-one is home we start talking then i accidently brush passed her tits she then take her bra off without remove her dress...............

anyone want to take the story up??

 

[sirhugs]

If no one does, why not write it yourself?

basic plot outline:

start with dialogue to draw reader in- maybe in mid chronology of events
then flashback to the beginning
set up characters- who
describe them. not too much detail. erotica readers like to use their imaginations. you can spend time on clothing, etcv if you want.
set first scene- bar- where
why- horny/drunk

what- the ride home
have sexplay in car?- where, what, who starts it ( why if you want), how far does it go?

that may be where we started, or maybe carrying her into house
otherwise we have what you set out as the "back to the beginning " point.

more where- the house/room whatever
more what- non sex activity- do they drink, watch movie, eat? or does he just try to put her to bed and she drags him in?

more sex- what sort? what body parts? how vigourous? build it slowly, or start fast and maintain? or fast then slow?

you can stop there, or deal with how one or both feel about it.

that's about a dozen elements. each therefore averages only 65 words to exceed the 750 word minimum. I know you can do it.

I'm a big dialogue fan, so try to have them talk at least every third paragraph or so. This visually makes it an easier read, and helps with the " show, not tell" principle of good writing.

Then proofread, spellcheck, proofread again, grammarcheck, proofread again, send to 2 friends to review, edit to reflect what they find , then submit. Presto! you're a writer!

 

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If no one does, why not write it yourself?

basic plot outline:

start with dialogue to draw reader in- maybe in mid chronology of events
then flashback to the beginning ...

Accepting your premise that craigbjonesy2j isn't already a writer of short stories, is it really a good idea to point a new hand at this ancient craft towards the use of flashbacks in their very first story?
A simple single episode should suffice, starting at:

set first scene- bar- where
why- horny/drunk

and going straight through, adding the descriptive bits into the text, eg "as I helped her into the car one of her crossed eyes looked at me and as I steadied her I could feel her nipple standing proud on her sharp ribs".

 

[sirhugs]

good points all, but I was hoping to improve the reader enjoyment, so craig would get positive votes/feedback. No doubt your approach is easier, better for beginner, but risks turning into one of those turgid stories with 500 words of description at the beginning. how does craig avoid that?