Daddies' girls are SOOO popular........!

[philadelphus]

Got my first stories online:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=302354

- one of them's got nearly 10,000 hits after just a couple of days! I'm amazed!! No, I'm flabbergasted!!! Guess people really like those daddies' girls..... Guess I'll have to do a sequel to that one...

But anyway, the very first of my stories was rejected on the grounds on non-conforming punctuation. Far's I could see,
it was a matter of three instances of a comma being outside of the dialog quotation marks instead of inside! Assuming that that's all it is (and I've corrected it now so the story is pending again), I'm real puzzled that the editors didn't see fit to correct such a tiny thing themselves. Not doing a lot of actual editing, are they?

Also, typos left in there by me are not corrected by the editors (well, that shouldn't be plural; 's just a matter of a "counch" that should have been "couch"). I know I'm supposed to make sure the spelling is good, but the odd mistake can slip by me now and again.

Anyway! Not complaining here, I'm REAL satisfied with the warm welcome (in terms of hits), so I guess I'd better get to work on more stories!

Hm, thought there was something else I wanted to say, but now I can't remember..... Ah, yes I do! Is there any kind of reward involved for the people who write the most popular stories here?? I know I'm not THERE yet, but a guy can think ahead, can't he?

philadelphus

 

[Singularity]

Constructive Feedback

Aside from the fact that you have a lot of views (which seems to come with the Incest/Taboo category more than any other), this is a pretty simple and ordinary story.

There isn't much plot or character development or dialog or anything other than a simple description of a series of events.

After a while of watching TV she turned her face up towards him and said, “Dad - kiss me.” Hal bent down to give her a father-daughter peck on the mouth, but Laurie took hold of his head and did not let go until she had treated his mouth to an eight-second French kiss. Hal did not resist, but enjoyed it. It was what she wanted, and it being her birthday and all, she should have what she wanted. He didn’t think anything of it.

There should be a comma after TV, and probably another after 'Dad' in place of the dash. The next sentence should begin a new paragraph, too, as you shift focus from her to him.

The wording and phrasing is a bit off, too. Here is what I would do with this paragraph:

After watching TV for a while, she turned her face up towards him and said, "Dad, kiss me."

Hal bent down to give her a father-daughter peck on the mouth, but Laurie grabbed his head with her hands and did not let go until she had treated his mouth to an eight-second French kiss.

He did not resist her. Instead, he enjoyed it. It was what she wanted, and being her birthday, he felt she should have what she wanted. Deep down, he did not think anything of it.."

 

[dr_mabeuse]

There are monthly prizes for the most popular stories as determined by reader voting. There’s cash involved, but popularity’s determined by the votes and not by the number of hits. A story needs a minimum of 50 votes and the winners usually rate at or above about a 4.8 or so.

10K hits in three days is an awful lot, but as Singularity says, incest stories always get the most views. A view doesn’t mean that people read it though. Anyone who clicks on your story counts as a view, whether they read it or just flee in horror.

---dr.M.

 

[Guest]

LOL

When you submit a story (to this free site) it will pretty much post as is.

Laurel may change the category if the author didn't get it quite right.

AND the software she uses takes away all paragraph indentations.

AND if you don't know how to add proper italics symbols for her system (as well as other special things) those will be lost.

But she will not correct spelling mistakes. Typos belong to the author. That's your job.

 

[philadelphus]

Thanks for the comments, people!

Monthly cash prizes?!! When, where, how?!?!

Both my posted stories now have nearly a hundred votes and close to 20,000 views, but unfortunately they aren't in the 4.80 rating range (4.33 and 4.51, respectively)...

Even so, things are going pretty well and I can't wait to see the receptiong that my pending (first posted) story gets.... heh heh!

philadelphus