I've got an idea for a story which features a young working-class English wife being encouraged to cuckold her husband with a pair of wealthy bankers. However this act is actually encouraged and facilitated by her mother-in-law who feels that her son is a drunk loser in general and that his wife needs the loving attention as well as the financial generosity of her lovers. The latter is especially important since the couple has a young daughter. Does anyone here feel that this idea is feasible? Thanks.
Cuckoldry with a twist
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i could get my head around this, yes. 
So what about the husband?
Is he really such a loser? If so, then maybe he deserves what he gets, or is losing his wife and not sure what to do about it?
Does he sit idly by and let it happen, or does he have a back bone and fight for his wife?
Is he really such a loser? If so, then maybe he deserves what he gets, or is losing his wife and not sure what to do about it?
Does he sit idly by and let it happen, or does he have a back bone and fight for his wife?
In answer to your first question, yes, he is that big of a loser, being a drunk who lives off welfare and prefers to spend time guzzling beer at the local pub rather than finding a job. As for your second question, I'm not sure which would be the more plausible scenario. Do you think that such an irresponsible lout would actually try to thwart his mother's plans?
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I'm glad to see such a positive response! BTW, I've got another idea and I'd like to hear your take on it. Both the wife's lovers are Asian, Chinese and Indian respectively and one of them hopes to start a IR site featuring themselves and the wife. In return for her participation, they intend to give the family a significant share of their total earnings. Do you think that both the wife as well as her mother-in-law would be agreeable? Thanks.
This is getting interesting
Okay, as I see it, you have two ways to go here. You can play him as almost a non-entity, as you say, a drunk with very little knowledge of his wife's desires,(the loser who loses his wife and has only himself to blame) or he could wake up from the prospect of losing his wife, get his act together, and fight like hell to get his wife back, much to the surprise of his mother.
One question, with him being such a loser, living off of welfare, etc. what did she see in him and why did she marry him in the first place?
I like the premise, but I think there are some questions you'd have to answer to make it believable.
What do you think?
Okay, as I see it, you have two ways to go here. You can play him as almost a non-entity, as you say, a drunk with very little knowledge of his wife's desires,(the loser who loses his wife and has only himself to blame) or he could wake up from the prospect of losing his wife, get his act together, and fight like hell to get his wife back, much to the surprise of his mother.
One question, with him being such a loser, living off of welfare, etc. what did she see in him and why did she marry him in the first place?
I like the premise, but I think there are some questions you'd have to answer to make it believable.
What do you think?
You raise an interesting question. I think I might evantually go for the second alternative since it would probably make for a more interesting story-line ultimately. Or alternatively, would it be feasible that he reaches a compromise with his mother and his wife's lovers? In the sense that the latter are allowed to sleep with his wife since he needs their money but with the full understnading that he is still her husband and thus sets the terms?
As for why she married him in the first place, the young woman was impressed by his macho personality and good looks. It also had something to do with the fact that she was already pregnant with his daughter. Again, thanks for reading.
Of course this is your story
So I can only offer ideas here. The first part of your answer as to why she married him, his macho good looks, etc. is fine, but if you bring a child into the mix, then you have the child with a mother who is fooling around and a drunk as a dad. That might be a little too much reality for a lot of people.
Personally, I do not like the idea of her with the bankers with his knowledge. That makes her a whore and him her pimp. You should have, at least, one person in the story we can like.
But that's just me. I hate wimpy cuckold stories and never, ever read them past the point of the guy getting turned on by his wife getting from some other guy, or him just sitting there and doing nothing.
As I said in one of my other threads, when I caught my wife with a guy I broke his nose and knocked out one of his teeth. If it wasn't for the fact that he was also married and couldn't afford to tell the police the truth, I would have been in the clink.
My take would be that the husband's mother let's it slip that his wife is screwing the bankers for money. He gets enraged, but then realizes what he has become and gets himself cleaned up. Then, through ingenuity, comes up with something that makes him good money. Now his next move is to fight and fight hard to get his wife back. His mother sees the man he has become and helps him. They live happily ever after. Okay, maybe it's hokey, but that's the way I would write it. Of course, like I said, this is your story. Don't listen to me!
So I can only offer ideas here. The first part of your answer as to why she married him, his macho good looks, etc. is fine, but if you bring a child into the mix, then you have the child with a mother who is fooling around and a drunk as a dad. That might be a little too much reality for a lot of people.
Personally, I do not like the idea of her with the bankers with his knowledge. That makes her a whore and him her pimp. You should have, at least, one person in the story we can like.
But that's just me. I hate wimpy cuckold stories and never, ever read them past the point of the guy getting turned on by his wife getting from some other guy, or him just sitting there and doing nothing.
As I said in one of my other threads, when I caught my wife with a guy I broke his nose and knocked out one of his teeth. If it wasn't for the fact that he was also married and couldn't afford to tell the police the truth, I would have been in the clink.
My take would be that the husband's mother let's it slip that his wife is screwing the bankers for money. He gets enraged, but then realizes what he has become and gets himself cleaned up. Then, through ingenuity, comes up with something that makes him good money. Now his next move is to fight and fight hard to get his wife back. His mother sees the man he has become and helps him. They live happily ever after. Okay, maybe it's hokey, but that's the way I would write it. Of course, like I said, this is your story. Don't listen to me!
You make excellent points and it does make sense that someone like the hubby would actually make an effort to get his wife back. However, as regards the wife whoring herself out, wouldn't that make her a somewhat sympathetic character since she has the child's welfare at heart?. . Also, would it be plausible to spin the story in such a way that the husband has no choice but to let his wife sleep with the bankers because he owes them money or tried to steal something from them as his mom points out? Nevertheless, determined to turn his life around, he tries his best to repay his debts and win his wife back as opposed to passively letting her become the sex-slave of the bankers. I guess I want to create a narrative which features a once confident alpha-male forced to become a submissive cuckold who is humiliated by the very same whimpy nerds whom he used to pick on all the time in high-school. However, enough of his former personality remains that he still makes a courageous effort to recover his wife. Also motivating him is the determination to prove to his mother (who organised the arrangement in the first place) that she was wrong about him being a complete loser. Thanks once again.
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I have written my share of LW tales, and try to avoid portraying hubby as a loser. I also prefer reading the versions where wife's empowerment enriches the marriage.
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scared of the trolls, eh?
just messin'.
ain't ascaired of no trolls... they attack even the most empowering happy endingest LW stories... it's about what I likes
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Personally,
If it were me, I'd march into their bank tell them face to face that it they messed.....no, if they even thought of messing with my wife I'd send someone to blow their kneecaps off. Then, once they got used to the idea of living the rest of their lives in a wheel chair, I'd send the guy back to cut off their balls........but that's just me.
I'm actually a sap for happy endings. I'm working on a story now that I'm having a real problem with. I'm wrestling with how I write a guy who knows of his wife's many affairs, but loves her so much he can not admit it to himself. He remains in denial for years. His heart refuses to listen to his brain. I'm trying, desperately to find a way I can write a character that I can still respect.
If it were me, I'd march into their bank tell them face to face that it they messed.....no, if they even thought of messing with my wife I'd send someone to blow their kneecaps off. Then, once they got used to the idea of living the rest of their lives in a wheel chair, I'd send the guy back to cut off their balls........but that's just me.
I'm actually a sap for happy endings. I'm working on a story now that I'm having a real problem with. I'm wrestling with how I write a guy who knows of his wife's many affairs, but loves her so much he can not admit it to himself. He remains in denial for years. His heart refuses to listen to his brain. I'm trying, desperately to find a way I can write a character that I can still respect.
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go back to the roots of it and think it through. if you're struggling to write it, it'll show.
I don't have to worry about it anymore
I've quit writing for this site! I worked on a 3 part story for over 3 weeks. I believe it was some of my best work to date. After having it sit in the, "pending" category for 5 days, they just rejected the first two parts! Hell, I have no idea why. They say to find an editor to go over the stories and redo, screw that! I pulled them all and I'm not wasting any more time submitting more.
I've quit writing for this site! I worked on a 3 part story for over 3 weeks. I believe it was some of my best work to date. After having it sit in the, "pending" category for 5 days, they just rejected the first two parts! Hell, I have no idea why. They say to find an editor to go over the stories and redo, screw that! I pulled them all and I'm not wasting any more time submitting more.
Did they at least tell you why you had to redo everything?
If the hubby wasn't a loser, readers wouldn't be able to sympathise with the cheating wife.
How do you sympathise with her?
Her husband is a loser, okay, does she divorce him? No, she cheats on him, nothing like kicking a guy when he's down! How is that sympathetic?
I just don't see any likable characters here. We have a loser husband who sits around in bars drinking with no regard to his family, including a little girl, we have the mother who cheats on her deadbeat husband with two guys, guys he knows and were rivals of his, and we have a conniving mother who sees no redeeming value in her own son and literary plots his total humiliation and degradation. I sure hope the little girl is likable.
It's just not my kind of story, doesn't mean a lot of people won't like it.
Her husband is a loser, okay, does she divorce him? No, she cheats on him, nothing like kicking a guy when he's down! How is that sympathetic?
I just don't see any likable characters here. We have a loser husband who sits around in bars drinking with no regard to his family, including a little girl, we have the mother who cheats on her deadbeat husband with two guys, guys he knows and were rivals of his, and we have a conniving mother who sees no redeeming value in her own son and literary plots his total humiliation and degradation. I sure hope the little girl is likable.
It's just not my kind of story, doesn't mean a lot of people won't like it.
