couldnt remember the name but hated the ending.

[gamer9643]

hated the ending.

I couldnt remember the name but it was on the incest section and it ended with his sister getting married to some guy named kevin i think it was. then he decides to move on with kevins little sister. thats bullshit. personally i would have written the he dsriven of a cliff and on the brink of death his sister relalized she couldnt live without him. this moving on bullshit is stupid.

if anyone could tell me the actual name of the story or author so i could tell them my comment personally i would greatly apreciate it.

 

[gamer9643]

what the hell

whats the deal i just read another story that made my blood boil. i mean i look to these stories to work me up not piss me off. a wife leaving her husband just because she won the lottery what the fuck. read
PARADISE MOM
thats a lottery winner that youy want to read. i mean come on his wife leaves his then his daughter splits with her husband whats with all the fucking break ups?

 

[gamer9643]

whats the deal

i read all these stories about these devoted people for the young teens obsessed with one person but when they finally get them low and behold there no longer a virgin like in
index : Incest/Taboo : The Day Hell Froze Over

sister supposebly loves her brother but low and behold go and loses it to a cucumber and sleeps with the next door neihbor.

 

[cloudy]

write your own. And here's a hint: no one writes just for you but you.

 

[kbate]

We are sorry we do not write stories suitable for you, I have reported this problem to Lit management and admonished every writer on Lit. Perhaps if you send a few paragraphs to give me some working ideas, I can pen something up for you. I'll get on this immediately, I promise.

 

[MichelleLovesTo]

We are sorry we do not write stories suitable for you, I have reported this problem to Lit management and admonished every writer on Lit. Perhaps if you send a few paragraphs to give me some working ideas, I can pen something up for you. I'll get on this immediately, I promise.

In Addition, if you could kindly submit a list of acceptable and unacceptable themes and topics, I'll be sure to give you your money's worth. Oh, wait...

 

[gamer9643]

chill

i didnt mean to offend anybody this is the story feedback section isnt it?
everyone has there own oppinions and mine is if you have a crush on someone you dont get pissed off at them and go sleep with someone else on a whim. as well as the fact of people leaving there spouses our having affairs is one of the few things that makes my blood boil. having the wife comes in while your bangin her sister or your sister or her mother and she decides to join in thats another matter.

also i dont like rape unless im looking for it. if i go to the non concent section fine but if im somewhere else i dont expect to see it thats why what ive read so far of family room is excellent. brother came home just in time to stop it kicked his ass and sister gave herself to him.

you want ideas paradise mom, mothers legacy,stacy what has been done of infatuation and the day hell froze over has been some of the hottest reading material i've read so far. although the sister in my opinion should have saved herself it would have made it that much hotter. also the story is that much more satisfying when in the end they wind up with each other for eternity. in paradise mom the moved to an island and became husband and wife in another the name i cant remember the siblings moved to another state and lived together as man and wife thats the kind of endings i like.

thats my opinion. love it hate it whatever freedom of speech suck doesnt it?

 

[gamer9643]

by the way

i also like it when i see siblings stick up for each other and through the first parts of the story one or both fight like hell against there attraction to the other.

"I am going to bend you over this counter and pump you so full of my sperm that you'll have to sit in the sink and drain with the dishes."

hottest phrase ive read yet


here are some deffinitions

incest sex between siblings or with a parent. NOT watching somebody doing it with your siblings or parent thats voyerism.

rape fucking someone against there will. having them scream no no stop you bastard and when there done say they didnt want to seem to easy is role play. personally i love role playing rape i do it with my girlfriend all the time and have scratches to prove it.

virgin having a hymen makes you a virgin. if you fuck yourself with a dildo and take it youre no longer a virgin so dont try and pass it off by saying youve never been with a man you still may be tight but youre no virgin.

and there are the three main definitions you need.

also i metinoned how cheating spouses makes my blood boil the same thing with sharing i dont care if its two girls because in real life i let that happen once when my girl was curious but letting the girl ride another dick is wrong its like there replacing you.

ps virgins are hot. just reading about a virgin getting nailed for the first time gets me seeing stars. i cant think of a guy in the world who isnt gay that doesnt dream about banging a virgin. just a thought because if you start the story with a virgin it's just that much better. the only time i see where you cant make the female character a virgin is if it's the guy's wife or mother.

also personally id like to see another chapter to mothers legacy where his sister comes home and he not only officialy knocks his mother up but both secretarys and his sister. id also like to the family room finished up with a very happy ending with him and his sister moving in together somwhere and becoming something like a husband and wife deal and the infatuation series being finished up.

i just deleted this last paragraph because i wrote it while i was really heated up. it was true but at the same time nobodys buisness. if they dealt with it so should i.

 

[gamer9643]

idea

i think the story catagories could be more defined into sub catagories.

as in

incest

mother/daughter
mother/son
brother/sister
sister/sister
rape
voyerism
virgins
etc.

this way you could search through only the storys you wish to see. this is just a personal idea.

i read another story. whats with the women just wanting there brothers to take there cherries before there prom or date well knowing there going to do someone else. thats screwed up. what ever happened to happy endings?

 

[BlackShanglan]

i mean come on his wife leaves his then his daughter splits with her husband whats with all the fucking break ups?

I agree. I hate break ups. They'd be much better off driving off of a cliff.

 

[gamer9643]

tell me about it

what ever happened to the happy ending? i mean if it's in the nonconcent/rape section okay i understand but what happened to finding your true love and spending your life together? what happened to till death do we part? the world may be fucked up but why do the authors insist bringing morality and reality into there stories. i personally come here to escape my life not relive the parts where the woman of my dreams derstroyed me. if you read a story where anyone says they love the other they shouldnt move on later in the story weather it's incest, rape, virgin, etc.

 

[MichelleLovesTo]

what ever happened to the happy ending? i mean if it's in the nonconcent/rape section okay i understand but what happened to finding your true love and spending your life together? what happened to till death do we part? the world may be fucked up but why do the authors insist bringing morality and reality into there stories. i personally come here to escape my life not relive the parts where the woman of my dreams derstroyed me. if you read a story where anyone says they love the other they shouldnt move on later in the story weather it's incest, rape, virgin, etc.

**Sigh.**


Okay, you seem to want attention above all else. I'll bite.

Not every story can please every reader. If we wrote the perfect story for you, someone else would be bitchin' and moanin'. I completely understand your wanting to read stories which appeal to you, and I completely understand feeling frustrated when it doesn't happen, but it does not mean the stories you're reading are bad -- they're just not for you. What's off-putting is your seeming inability to see that your opinion on, while valid, is also subjective.

There's nothing wrong with stating your likes and dislikes, but you come off as if you're words are true of all readers. In addition, this is Story Feedback -- as you pointed out -- and yet you don't mention story names.

There is a whole section with romance stories -- they have mostly happy endings and people preparing to spend their lives together. I also like a happy ending, and have written my share, but sometimes the story won't logically allow it to happen -- sometimes it would be fake as to be jarring.

People often think that in fiction anything can happen because you're not tied down to reality. Not true. Depending on the story, you have a different logic and reality with which to deal. If a character acts inconsistent, people will notice. If you make up a happy ending out of whole cloth, which no framework for it, that will bug readers -- it's also not satisfying to write.

I wrote advice in a book once which addressed this point. Sometimes people in real life don't make sense, sometimes crazy things happen for seemingly no reason, but what works in reality is not what works in fiction. You could fictionalize a completely true story from the paper, and people would slam you for it not being realistic. Fiction demands more logic and consistency -- not less.

Sometimes in stories -- and in reality -- two people can love one another and have it still not work out. That's why if you fake a happy ending, people will notice -- they might be grateful that they didn't have the pain of the sad ending, but the story will not ring true or resonate right.

It says something that people say they want a happy ending, and yet some of the greatest stories of all time end with tragedy or sadness. Sometimes a writer has to give the reader the ending which is right, not the ending which feels good for the moment.

Anyhow, when you do find stories you like, take a minute to let the writer know.

 

[gamer9643]

oh yeah

you want names two for one, mothers legacy, ther family room (not finished and i hope ends peacefully), a boy in babe land especially are all sstroys with happy endings. i dont speak for everyone nor do i try i meerly speak my mind and give my opinion. i know every story is not written for me and are all written for varied tastes but i do know that some stories are not labled in my opinion clearly enough so when i go to read them i start reading something that is actually upsetting to me. some storys labled as rough are indeed nonconcent while others that are supposed to be incest are nothing but voyeristic.

 

[MichelleLovesTo]

you want names two for one, mothers legacy, ther family room (not finished and i hope ends peacefully), a boy in babe land especially are all sstroys with happy endings. i dont speak for everyone nor do i try i meerly speak my mind and give my opinion. i know every story is not written for me and are all written for varied tastes but i do know that some stories are not labled in my opinion clearly enough so when i go to read them i start reading something that is actually upsetting to me. some storys labled as rough are indeed nonconcent while others that are supposed to be incest are nothing but voyeristic.

Yeah, I think we all agree that labels and catagories are tough. Sometimes a story fits nowhere in particular and everywhere in general. There's no absolute preventative from having you -- or anyone else -- be upset. And sometimes, if something is a legitimate plot twist, the writer can't advertise a certain element.

 

[gamer9643]

i agree

but if they could give something in the name or description to tell those what the story is going to be about so if youre intrested you'll read it and if you're not you can stay away i would have many less complaints. one story inpaticular bugged me because a mother remaried to a shy man and asked her sons opinion about giving him a child. well i thought the story from the name and description would be she left him for her son but no she slept with him and her son stood in the doorway and watched. thats not what i'm intrested in and bothered me. as one that i read where a brother and sister drove into the oposing line of trafic and died. had the name or description said anything like that i wouldnt have even started reading that story.

 

[caramelgirl_2]

Obviously the characters and the story were engaging enough for you to keep reading it-- which means the author accomplished his/her goal as a writer.
If you didn't like the ending, you may want to choose another writer to read. To want to be told the whole story before you read it....well...doesn't that defeat the idea of READING IT?

 

[gamer9643]

actually

i didnt finish reading it if i see it might take a twist i dont like i go straight to the last paragraph so i dont get involoved in the story and know if it has an ending i'll enjoy.

 

[Mercurius]

also i dont like rape unless im looking for it.

Oh, that clears things up. Thanks for the tip.

 

[MichelleLovesTo]

Oh, that clears things up. Thanks for the tip.

Oddly enough, I think I understand this one. The poster doesn't want to be surprised and only wants it to show up under non-consent.

 

[BlackShanglan]

Yet another argument for implementing multiple story codes. I wonder if they ever will.

 

[gamer9643]

all im saying

all im saying is there should be a better way o catagorizying the stories so we all get what we want.

as you no dont know by the storys i've listed i like reading in the incest section. even if i didnt one thing i dont really like is when the women/mother while still married cheats on her husband.