Could you give me some feedback on my Trade Fair Story, please?
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cherrylips_au
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I read your story but not being familar with Pippi Longstocking I was a little confused by who the characters are.
Also as I'm not familar with this fetish it was difficult to fully understand what was happening.
You mentioned she loved to masterbate and you refered to her playing with the balloons is she using them to masterbate with? Sorry for my ignorance but I was confused as to the way you implied she played with the balloons.
I didn't think the story flowed well as first she is at the Trade Fair then you said it was 2 years ago and then it's the stallions birthday the following Summer.
I did like some of your descriptions about the balloons and the way Pippi felt when she saw them.
Hope this helps a little, sorry I couldn't be more helpful.
Also as I'm not familar with this fetish it was difficult to fully understand what was happening.
You mentioned she loved to masterbate and you refered to her playing with the balloons is she using them to masterbate with? Sorry for my ignorance but I was confused as to the way you implied she played with the balloons.
I didn't think the story flowed well as first she is at the Trade Fair then you said it was 2 years ago and then it's the stallions birthday the following Summer.
I did like some of your descriptions about the balloons and the way Pippi felt when she saw them.
Hope this helps a little, sorry I couldn't be more helpful.
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