Contemplative

[lrisheyes]

Removed so as not to break any rules.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

This was written by someone very close to me. I was both impressed and a bit disturbed by it. For several reasons, I cannot discuss it with the author.

Hello, lrisheyes, and welcome to the poetry board.

So, if you cannot discuss it with the author, what is your intention? Are you looking for feedback on the poem? Did the author ask for it?

 

[lrisheyes]

Thanks Lauren

The author isn't aware that I've read it, I inadvertantly came across it online (it's posted on a live journal) but were I to let on that I had read it, the author would almost certainly consider it an invasion of their privacy.

As I said, I was impressed by it and wanted to share it with others, perhaps gain some insight too.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Thanks Lauren

The author isn't aware that I've read it, I inadvertantly came across it online (it's posted on a live journal) but were I to let on that I had read it, the author would almost certainly consider it an invasion of their privacy.

As I said, I was impressed by it and wanted to share it with others, perhaps gain some insight too.

Well, I thought it was a bit prosaic and with a Kerouackian stream-of-consciousness flow - which ultimately works well with the theme, but with a number of odd line-break choices. I don't know if there's much point in discussing the poem's merits here and now, if the poet doesn't know about it.

If you're just worried about the author, I wouldn't be. The piece reads as if he's got a little "Edgar Allan Poe vs. The Imp Of The Perverse" thing going on, or a "Bret Easton Ellis vs. Patrick Bateman in Lunar Park" overdose.

That being said, I know you mean well, but it's against the rules of the board to post copyrighted material without the author's consent...

 

[lrisheyes]

Thanks for your insight.

As for breaking any rules, there is no copyright.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Thanks for your insight.

As for breaking any rules, there is no copyright.

Everything is copyrighted, even if there is no copyright notice.

 

[lrisheyes]

Removed so as not to break any rules.

There, all better now..........