"Confessions" needs an editor

[RedHotLadybug]

Hello all!

I have been toying with this idea for a few weeks and finally typed/copied it out and would like someone too look it over. I'm calling it Confessions of a Fairy Godmother

Yes it is as silly as it seems. The story follows Gwendolyn the Fair, a rather kinky fairy as she begins her career as a fairy godmother. I will go ahead and say I've paired this with the storys of the brothers Grimm, this first one being that of King Thrushbeard.

It's a twist on what they've written, even using their words for the mostpart (total credit given to them of course) but embellished with this new line of characters and a few more sexy ways to learn a lesson. Godmothers in his tale follow the generations so even though the stories are stand-alonish, they can be built one otop another creating a series.

Gwendolyn meanwhile keeps a diary so there's moment where the story is broken by her diary entries filled with her POV. The whole thing is for fun so "serious development" is not what I'm going for. The stories are already complete with their "happily ever afters" just spruced up for more a more kinky way of telling.

I'd like an editor familiar with the Grimm Brother's works who'd like to catch grammar mistakes (mine, not theirs) and maybe offer a general comment on the end result. You can expect to see a wide range of every category (there's only one route to take when I reach Hansel and Gretel... no wait... two... it could go mature as well LOL)

Anyone interested? The first one is just shy of 11,000 words.

 

[turner28]

I will be happy to assist you. Contact me on Yahoo Messenger by adding me as a friend and sending me what you want me to see. My status is always busy but IM me anyway.

E.T>

yahoo id - turner28

 

[PacoFear]

I will be happy to assist you. Contact me on Yahoo Messenger by adding me as a friend and sending me what you want me to see. My status is always busy but IM me anyway.

E.T>

yahoo id - turner28

Dude, seriously? RHL posted that like a month ago. Likewise, the other half-dozen dead threads you dug up.

And adding one male author to your long list of female ones was a nice touch. Trolling much?

Gang, who's got the Noob Hat of Desperation? We have a new winner.

 

[turner28]

Excuse me it has been a long time since I have been around. So long that I had forgotten which email I used - was hubby's and I joined with my own email. No I do not tend to check dates OK sue me. Trolling NO. Exploring, learning about the forum which had not existed the last time I was here. Or at least I did not know about it then.

I do not know who you are but if you want to jump on soomeone find someone who deserves it. There is far too much garbage in the world for this type of petty bickering. It would seem that you are trolling just looking for a fuss. I am here to write for YOU and to assist other readers - PERIOD.

Do not waste my time with childish antics.

E.T.



And incidentally, I am not a DUDE.

 

[PacoFear]

Excuse me it has been a long time since I have been around. So long that I had forgotten which email I used - was hubby's and I joined with my own email. No I do not tend to check dates OK sue me. Trolling NO. Exploring, learning about the forum which had not existed the last time I was here. Or at least I did not know about it then.

I do not know who you are but if you want to jump on soomeone find someone who deserves it. There is far too much garbage in the world for this type of petty bickering. It would seem that you are trolling just looking for a fuss. I am here to write for YOU and to assist other readers - PERIOD.

Do not waste my time with childish antics.

E.T.

Whew, you managed to huck it right on up to the moral high ground didn't you? It took you three paragraphs, but still, solid work there. Let me have a go?

If I was hard on you, E.T., it's because I've perhaps grown a little too fond of the Editor's Forum. It's my favorite corner of Lit, an oddball cast of characters, most of whom are genuinely trying to help each other and the hopeful new authors stumbling in through the door.

Sadly, a trickle of lonely guys also stumbles in through the same door. For whatever reason, they're driven near-hysterical at the opportunity to offer their "help" to women with a demonstrated interest in naughty things. They commence to touching everything with their dirty, sticky, awkward, needy fingers, dragging up old posts and pleading for attention.

Boiled down? It wasn't petty bickering or fuss-trolling that inspired my reaction, E.T. It was love for this funny, smart, silly, backward and yet most definitely special little place.

Crud, it took me three paragraphs too. Anybody know a good editor?

-Paco

 

[_Lynn_]

Whew, you managed to huck it right on up to the moral high ground didn't you? It took you three paragraphs, but still, solid work there. Let me have a go?

If I was hard on you, E.T., it's because I've perhaps grown a little too fond of the Editor's Forum. It's my favorite corner of Lit, an oddball cast of characters, most of whom are genuinely trying to help each other and the hopeful new authors stumbling in through the door.

Sadly, a trickle of lonely guys also stumbles in through the same door. For whatever reason, they're driven near-hysterical at the opportunity to offer their "help" to women with a demonstrated interest in naughty things. They commence to touching everything with their dirty, sticky, awkward, needy fingers, dragging up old posts and pleading for attention.

Boiled down? It wasn't petty bickering or fuss-trolling that inspired my reaction, E.T. It was love for this funny, smart, silly, backward and yet most definitely special little place.

Crud, it took me three paragraphs too. Anybody know a good editor?

-Paco

*snerk*

 

[turner28]

Paco,

Glad we had the chance to meet. Years ago when my hubby came here I never participated in anything. I read the stories - loved a few of them. When I first began writing I could find NO ONE to assist me and I decided that I would be the one I had looked for when I needed help. So if I come off a little eager please understand it is sincere. I have been in their shoes looking for help and not finding it, needing an honest opinion and not getting it, needing a friendly voice and not hearing it.

I am here to assist writers in developing their stories for publication. I am FEMALE and not looking for anything beyond some new friends. If it seems like I "troll" I am simply exploring the forum which is still new to me, learning my way around and posting in topics I find intriguing. I am long winded - just check out my story. It is the 1st in a series ok. I can honestly say I never learned the fine art of summing up. With that said, yes it may take me a good deal of words to express what I want to convey, but I do eventually get to the point.

I hope Literotica finds me a good addition as an editor. I am currently working with a couple of authors who each have very different needs. I am enjoying the work and the opportunity to help them develop their stories. So, do not think I am one of those people who skim the story and not grasp the message. When I work with a story it gets my full attention.

I am always available to writers seeking honest assistance.

E.T.

 

[Firebrain]

Turner28 -- you might want to check the dialogue punctuation in your stories. Your stories are the best advertisement for you as an editor. There's a guide in my sig.

 

[turner28]

Thanks. I have not had thepleasure of anyone professionally editing this. Some are used purposely though. I also noticed that much of my formatting was changed when the story was posted here. Which is why I mentioned that if it was difficult to read all anyone needed to do was ask me for the MSWord file.

I am looking over what you recommended. Thank you.

 

[turner28]

OOps, I don't see a link in your sig?!?

 

[Firebrain]

It would be "Dialogue This." In particular, I noted that you were closing dialogue with a full stop when you required a comma, and capitalising your dialogue tags.

 

[_Lynn_]

Turner28 -- you might want to check the dialogue punctuation in your stories. Your stories are the best advertisement for you as an editor. There's a guide in my sig.

I believe forum posts tell a lot too. Using basic spelling, punctuation, and grammar is simple enough to do and shows if the person has the knowledge to help others or if they only think they do.

 

[turner28]

Some of the closes are deliberate, check the setting etc.

Anyway I will check it out after coffee thx.

E.T.

 

[Firebrain]

Some of the closes are deliberate, check the setting etc.

Anyway I will check it out after coffee thx.

E.T.

They're also wrong What you've done is just grammatically incorrect; there's no stylistic reason why one would possibly want to do "Until later." He said. (not verbatim; just an example).

ETA -- there's no shame in admitting that you're wrong. I didn't know that different types of dashes existed until recently (!) and I used to teach English.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... I didn't know that different types of dashes existed until recently (!) and I used to teach English.

That is because they were only available in typeset documents until very recently. The print industry and published authors knew about them, but not the general public. Typewriters didn't have them and word processing, as we now know it, didn't become generally available until the 1980s.