boredpisces
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I'm actually looking for opinions on the first chapter for something I'm hoping to publish. It's not erotic... it's not even really a romance, but I'm not asking for anyone to edit or even read it in its entirety, so there you go.
I finished a manuscript a couple years ago, shopped it around to agents, and what little feedback I got very nicely indicated that the beginning completely blew. Boring and explain-y and adding a prologue just gave too much away. People who've read the entire manuscript have forgiven me for it (including a few strangers I picked up on facebook), but they were committed to reading the whole thing no matter what. I'm not going to be able to market to strangers (or agents) by saying "It gets better, I swear."
I am currently torn between two possible opening chapters.
One is from the original text, edited and bumped up to try and be a more interesting starting point. The other is completely different to start, although it ends similarly, just in a different setting and pov. I wouldn't post here, but everyone I know and trust opinion-wise has already read my first draft manuscript in its entirety.
I would like for someone who doesn't know where the story is going to tell me IF it sounds interesting (and why), which is MORE interesting (and why), and whether or not it makes sense to them. I've been so close to this for so long, it's nearly impossible to see it for what it is.
I finished a manuscript a couple years ago, shopped it around to agents, and what little feedback I got very nicely indicated that the beginning completely blew. Boring and explain-y and adding a prologue just gave too much away. People who've read the entire manuscript have forgiven me for it (including a few strangers I picked up on facebook), but they were committed to reading the whole thing no matter what. I'm not going to be able to market to strangers (or agents) by saying "It gets better, I swear."
I am currently torn between two possible opening chapters.
One is from the original text, edited and bumped up to try and be a more interesting starting point. The other is completely different to start, although it ends similarly, just in a different setting and pov. I wouldn't post here, but everyone I know and trust opinion-wise has already read my first draft manuscript in its entirety.
I would like for someone who doesn't know where the story is going to tell me IF it sounds interesting (and why), which is MORE interesting (and why), and whether or not it makes sense to them. I've been so close to this for so long, it's nearly impossible to see it for what it is.
