Comments on "A midwinters night"

[Keltic_Soul]

Please comment on my first story A Midwinters Night.


Thanks,

Keltic_Soul

 

[kristydoll]

Okay, first off - here is the link to your story:

A Mid Winters Night

Now - about your story.

I see that you have a "scene" in mind, and saying that, the scene itself is good. The problem lies in the writing. We all have fantasies. We like to read about erotic exploits and even tell of our own (whether real or fantasy). The trouble is, its not always easy to write them.

I don't wish to disillusion you from writing - but you need to brush up on some basics. Your story was very hard to read. Proper sentence stucture and the use of punctuation is definately needed.

Please do not take this too hard. Am even willing to help you out if you wish *smiles*

kristy