Cock or Member, Penis or Dick

[Aaron Dazer]

Ok i got some feed back on one of my story’s and it got me thinking. Now I understood where they were coming form but the element in direct reference to the topic was something else. Not my point though. got me thinking. so I’m wanting to take a pole.

When writing a sex scene should the Vulgarity of the terms used increase as the Act progresses.

She places her hand on his bulge, then unzips his jeans. His member escapes into the open. Now throbbing his penis is exposed in front of her wet lips. She licks spreading the wetness. She reaches out and grabs the shaft of his cock with her hand. Then the tip of his cock with her lips.

Or use consistent terms (one or two) for the Objects in reference for clear easier reading?

She places her hand on his cock, then unzips his jeans. His cock escapes into the open. Now throbbing his cock is exposed in front of her wet lips. She licks spreading the wetness. She reaches out and grabs the shaft of his cock with her hand. Then the tip of his cock with her lips.


Would one be considered slower then the other? or different styles or both? bad good Grammer? what? am i making sence?

If so please arrange the following in order form most acceptable to dirtiest. Place together if you feel the same degree. Please add and delete as you see fit.

Dick
Cock
bone,
erection
hard-on
manhood
member
organ
penis
prick
rod
shaft

Sometime I’d like the adjectives and objects to intensify as the story does. and forgive me if this is on another thread.

and can some one add to this list, Throbbing, twitching, pulsing, shaking

 

[Uther_Pendragon]

Well, there are oneor two on your list I wouldn't use.
(I cringe at "bone." It isn't, and -- unless your hero
is literally a son of a bitch -- it doesn't even contain a
bone.)
Generally, though, I feel that the term used should reflect
the language that the narrator or POV character would
use. I'm writing a complexly-related set of stories in
another venue, and having a little fun changing the
vocabulary as I go from one POV character to another. She
feels his prick enter her quim; he feels his cock
enter her cunt.

 

[Guest]

Generally I will be consistant with which words I use. Dialogue may use a different word than the story simply because the character might be more prim and proper or more vulgar.

bone,
erection
hard-on
manhood
member
organ
prick

I pretty much won't use any of those words (thought I *might* occasionally use member, but it's rare), just a personal preference.

 

[whispering_surrender]

I think a lot of the answer to your question is related to the writing style the author uses. Most of my stories have a distinct feel. To quote a recent feedback, "sappy, romantic crap, but sweet." In mine, I tend to use action to describe what I'm talking about with just a few "cock's" or "pussy's" thrown in for effect. That wouldn't work for every author or every reader though.

Semi-helpfully,
Whisper

 

[Dirt Man]

For me it depends on the characters interacting within the story, and the educational background that they are supposed to have. Quite often a woman won't say much of anything during the actual act of intercourse, prefering just to moan, but she may before, and afterwards. As I said it just depends on how I wish to portray each character's background, education level, and other various quirks. In this way I bring the reader right into the setting with me.

As Always
I Am the
Dirt Man

 

[shereads]

I've often wondered, "a member of what?"

 

[gauchecritic]

Depends entirely on the 'voice' of the author. I tend to get more explicit as the scene heats up. But the words the characters themselves use may be completely opposite or exactly the same. One phrase neither I nor any of my characters would use is:

He placed his gift in her love.

Gauche

 

[whispering_surrender]

Depends entirely on the 'voice' of the author. I tend to get more explicit as the scene heats up. But the words the characters themselves use may be completely opposite or exactly the same. One phrase neither I nor any of my characters would use is:

He placed his gift in her love.

Gauche

Some people would use that?!?

Whisper

 

[Colleen Thomas]

For me the use of vulgarity depends on the mood of the story. The more vulgar references are used when the narrative POV is tied to a character who might use them. I run into this a lot when it comes to using the C-word or not as well as using the P-word or not. If building the erotic tension by increasing the vulgarity works for you stay with it. If it dosen't then select the words based on the mood of the story at that point where you use it.

In some ways it mirrors life. A sweet shy girl may refer to the act as Making love with a blush in mixed company, but may well urge her lover to Fuck me! during the throes of passion.

-Colly

 

[gauchecritic]

A sweet shy girl may refer to the act as Making love with a blush in mixed company, but may well urge her lover to Fuck me! during the throes of passion.

-Colly

Just point her out. A woman who, in the midst of passion, would urge me to fuck you. Or have I taken that entirely the wrong way?

Gauche

 

[shereads]

Am I becoming more submissive by the moment?

Just for you, Gauche:

"ahhh god! baby, please fuck Colleen!! Fuck her, you hot stud. Do it!!! I need it!! Take that thick meaty member in your big strong hand and fuck somebody, anybody...Please, baby please pl--- ahhgod god god god GOD!!! Unghhh!"

 

[Lipstick]

I'm with Shereads......Member of what? Member makes me think of the high school vice principal in 10 Things I Hate About You.

Hehehehe!

 

[Guest]

Aa: pardon me if I'm wrong, but your question makes me think you have not read much porn, erotica, what-have-you; at least not with a critical eye. Whether or not you have, I would recommend more reading. Then after you've decided on a few good (per your judgment/standards) stories, examine the use of sexual terms and language and see how you think they work, or not.

Your poll is useless, practically, as everyone has their own style, voice, intent, etc.

I myself love the word cock, in writing and real life. I will use erection and penis, maybe prick or dick (do not like the word but sometimes it fits). I cannot see myself ever using bone, manhood, rod, shaft; they seem 50s to me.

I love the English language but I do think it pales in sexual words and terms compared to others.

best to you, Perdita

 

[wildsweetone]

She places her hand on his bulge, then unzips his jeans. His member escapes into the open. Now throbbing his penis is exposed in front of her wet lips. She licks spreading the wetness. She reaches out and grabs the shaft of his cock with her hand. Then the tip of his cock with her lips.

or

She places her hand on his cock, then unzips his jeans. His cock escapes into the open. Now throbbing his cock is exposed in front of her wet lips. She licks spreading the wetness. She reaches out and grabs the shaft of his cock with her hand. Then the tip of his cock with her lips.

Would one be considered slower then the other? or different styles or both? bad good Grammer? what? am i making sence?

I have to say that though neither option particularly appeals to me, the first has preference over the second. The repetitive use of the word 'cock' (or repetitive use of any word) bugs me to the point where I'd back click automatically.

I understand you are looking more towards the building up of tension/emotion and one way to do that, yes, is with the words you are using for a particular object.

Obviously, one short paragraph is not going to cut the grade in a story that you'd like to properly build to a climax. But you've got the right gist of the idea. Build tension using language.

The key as you have pointed out, is getting the language sorted in stages of least to most tension.

With me not being an expert, perhaps the soft sounding initials of the words should be the least tension grabbing, and the hard sounding initials should be the most tension grabbing...

Using your list and just off the cuff without great thought... i.e.


member
manhood
shaft
organ
penis
prick
erection
hard-on
bone
rod
dick
cock

 

[Aaron Dazer]

Ok get it

Thanks all, even though what I asked was completely lost except for one reply, I got my answer. Regardless of what's used people have the personal Preferences and Most would miss sight of what you were trying to do anyway. I see the point on Dialogue but that wasn’t mine.

In answer to Perdita, I first came to Lit when you could read the Whole Sight in a weekend. I have my options of the words and more offend then not I’m turned off to a story because of lack of build up during the Sex. Not lack of build-up toward getting to the sex.

Dialogue is a completely different subject then what I was bringing up.

However my question was answered. increasing profanity in text will catch the attention of some but most would look past the actually term used for the Various Nouns. Better to progress the Adjective instead. And use a few consistent terms for the nouns.

My goal now is to write a story that uses, ‘he places his gift into her love’ frequently that Gauchecritic likes.