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[jaxjack1980]

closed

 

[CyranoJ]

"Nah, the time for talkin' be over, time fer those cock-sucking lips to get to work! Put them lily white hands of yers behind yer back so I can show ya the Odean 'perience in full effect!"

My advice is: if you don't really know anything about how Ebonics/dialect work (and it is clear from this sample that you don't), steer clear of them. You can have the guy in this scene render these sentiments in relatively normal English with more effect than having them sound like they stepped out of a racist cartoon from a century ago. Nobody actually talks like this.

(The subject matter doesn't intrinsically bother me: mdom/IR with characters deliberately leaning into the "taboo" element of what they think they're doing can be perfectly fine. But stuff like the quote above is really distracting on account of its being unintentionally comical.)

If you really really want to do this, try listening to some actual College footballers talk and try minimizing the cartoonishness if you're rendering it in prose. There really are some distinctive dialect patterns with Black players from certain parts of the States, but most of them sound nothing like what you're doing here.

 

[lovecraft68]

Um...

Yeah....no.

 

[jaxjack1980]

My advice is: if you don't really know anything about how Ebonics/dialect work (and it is clear from this sample that you don't), steer clear of them. You can have the guy in this scene render these sentiments in relatively normal English with more effect than having them sound like they stepped out of a racist cartoon from a century ago. Nobody actually talks like this.

(The subject matter doesn't intrinsically bother me: mdom/IR with characters deliberately leaning into the "taboo" element of what they think they're doing can be perfectly fine. But stuff like the quote above is really distracting on account of its being unintentionally comical.)

If you really really want to do this, try listening to some actual College footballers talk and try minimizing the cartoonishness if you're rendering it in prose. There really are some distinctive dialect patterns with Black players from certain parts of the States, but most of them sound nothing like what you're doing here.

Point taken