Clean Up

[Prodiver]

Hello,
I have just published a poem about orally cleaning cream pies. I know this may not be to everyone’s tastes, but I’d appreciate any feedback, if you’ll excuse the pun!
https://www.literotica.com/p/clean-up-2

 

[gk6h]

Love eating creampie

 

[AlinaX]

Is it really salty-sweet?

Not sure about ending with creed. I might suggest ‘with this reverent deed’ instead.

ETA:
Each night she comes home, I’m inevitably torn
Between butter or sweet… or salty popcorn
ETA2:
For your thoughts, dear, a penny that I’d love you to spend
While I kneel in worship and tongue I extend

(Sorry, I’ll shut up now. 5 stars, btw.)

ETA3 (Okay, I lied, but can’t resist):

I have a man who waits at home
While I the bars and nightclubs roam
In search of one who’ll fill me up
Till I’m an o’erflowing cup
Of cum my husband will adore
When lying beneath me on the floor

 

[Prodiver]

Alina, it was a toss up between creed and deed for me too. I went with creed because to go through with cream pie eating, you really have to believe in it!