Chastized, feminized, sodomized

[Stefani]

Was looking for some feedback on my first story submission to Lit.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=203914

As the title in the subject line suggests, it's a Female Domination story about a woman who puts a submissive male into chastity, feminizes, and then... well, you know the rest.

Actually I'm not crazy about the title. If you can suggest something better, I'm all ears.

Thanx,
Steffie

 

[Lustin Kink]

Oh.............My God!

That poor little man! My very first reaction to your story was that Erin is one sick bitch. You certainly have one hell of a devilishly twisted mind to come up with something as creatively decadent as your first submission. You did a bang up job (no pun intended). Domination has never been a huge turn on for me but I found your story quite arousing. I have to say that your ability to put in print exactly what pours from your perverted mind is astounding! Please, do not take any of what I say as an insult. I respect and am somewhat envious of what you are able to produce.

This has got to be the best of any author's first submissions that I have read. I repeat, The Best! Your ability to convey your character's emotions (I feel this is your strongest trait) is impeccable. Although Kim wanted it, I actually felt genuine pity for that poor little man. Although I'm not an avid dominance fan, Erin's relentless control over Kim was absolutely delicious.

Aside from a few grammatical and spelling errors, I voted a five and I give an equal number of thumbs up. Your content and story telling ability certainly make up for any and all minor mistakes.

The title is perfect. Please, keep writing! I can't wait for the next one!

~Lustin Kink

 

[Stefani]

Lusty,

Thank you for the encouragement.

Yes, I suppose I do have a devilish mind in some respects. Welcome to my nightmare!

Sorry about the typos, misspellings. I work as a writer for an ad agency, and mostly do creative work. I leave it to proofreaders to catch my mistakes (and their efforts are always appreciated). None of us are perfect. As Ernest Hemmingway said, "We are all apprentices at a craft no one ever masters."

I'm working on a second devilish story... This one called "Beyond Alternatives." Deals with similar issues... female Domination... male submission... it isn't as graphic as the first story... it'll be more of a mind fuck than an orgy of thrusting bodies... although there is an group sex scene. ;-)

Hope to have it posted this week.

S.