Celebrities

[uksnowy]

I have a story brewing using several UK "slebs" and 2 particularly as main characters. I haven't see a sticky or ruling about that so far. Can anyone please point me in the right direction?

 

[oggbashan]

Try this How-To:

https://www.literotica.com/s/on-writing-celebrity-fantasies

 

[uksnowy]

Thanks a lot to read and could be useful. it's a work in progress and I may just chance it and submit.

 

[Handley_Page]

Thanks a lot to read and could be useful. it's a work in progress and I may just chance it and submit.

Snowy, please do not forget your Beta reader and an Editor.

 

[49greg]

Snowy, please do not forget your Beta reader and an Editor.

Agreed, "chancing it and submitting" is a good way to get a rejection.

 

[ishtat]

Self help wanted!

Thanks a lot to read and could be useful. it's a work in progress and I may just chance it and submit.

Does it ever occur to you how discourteous you are? You ask for advice, then say it's too much to read, let alone follow. You have a record of submitting stories which are a mess - almost beyond editing, but seem to be too idle, either to take notice, or do anything else to improve.

The previous posters are too kind to you - get your act together.

 

[uksnowy]

Ishtit get your act together, I said it's a lot to read, but not today as it happens, I will - thank you.

Idle? I am here and editing everyday and trying to get it right. I did start out on the wrong foot - yes. The mods are now punishing me harshly but I am learning to live with that, after all Lit is not the end of the world, but obviously is to you.

My stories are not a mess - thanks again, there are several in here already - how can you be so rude, have you read them? I am learning on this steep curve and improving all the time.

Get back in your box.

 

[Zeb_Carter]

Oops wrong thread....sorry

 

[sr71plt]

The mods are now punishing me harshly

Not sure what you mean by this. Mods here only are involved in the forum, and folks on the forum have been pretty mild in the face of you asking the same "just won't get it" questions over and over again. Do you mean the submission editor? She's not a Mod and there's only one of her. You seem to be having difficulty getting this too.

And, yes, when you ask for advice and are given it and you say you don't have time or inclination to take the advice, you are being discourteous to those who made the effort to help you.

 

[Green_Knight]

My stories are not a mess - thanks again, there are several in here already - how can you be so rude, have you read them? I am learning on this steep curve and improving all the time.

I've read some of them. They're so difficult to read that I've never yet got as far as the bottom of page one. Ishtat was right, if a bit less than kind.

Take this sentence as an example:

"Her hands rubbed her exposed belly and her blowing mouth and puffing cheeks indicated a feeling of being bloated."​

It's only when you get to the word 'indicated' that you realise that she's not rubbing her puffing cheeks and blowing mouth, as well as her exposed belly. You then have to go back to the start and reread the sentence. When I find myself doing that two or three times within the same number of paragraphs, I give up.

And that's one of your more coherent sentences.

Sorry, but you really do need a good, patient editor – and you don't need to let your ego stand in the way of taking his or her advice.

 

[uksnowy]

Green Knight, I don't recognise that sentence you quote, is it really mine?? I agree it is crap, please indicate where it came from.
Thanks fr commenting.

 

[sr71plt]

The Lit. search engine claims that sentence is in https://www.literotica.com/s/quietly-watching

 

[Lori_the_Hoosier]

Green Knight, I don't recognise that sentence you quote, is it really mine?? I agree it is crap, please indicate where it came from.
Thanks fr commenting.

I call bullshit on this; it's 'Quietly Watching', by you, page 1, Para. 1, so pretty much the intro passage, and now I'm curious why you can't recognize your own work...

 

[sr71plt]

If you've written a lot of stories over a long time, you're not going to remember every phrase you've ever written. And every phrase you've ever written isn't going to be pure gold, either. I think it's bad form to be bringing forth bits and pieces of what someone has written and making fun of them on the AH.

 

[Lori_the_Hoosier]

You're right, it was a cheap shot; my apologies.

 

[uksnowy]

Shit! yes it was mine and a long time ago, That story has been edited by me now, must check, but thanks for the back up too.