Category Help Needed

[impressive]

Damn, I should've made this a poll.

So far, here's what I've received:

2 for Group Sex
1 for Mind Control
1 for Romance

On the other question:

1 for Sam
2 for Richard
0 for Charlie

Have not yet heard back from 5 people. Very interesting. Can't wait to see how the others fall.

 

[matriarch]

Damn, I should've made this a poll.

So far, here's what I've received:

2 for Group Sex
1 for Mind Control
1 for Romance

On the other question:

1 for Sam
2 for Richard
0 for Charlie

Have not yet heard back from 5 people. Very interesting. Can't wait to see how the others fall.

You didn't include Sam and Charlie.

 

[impressive]

You didn't include Sam and Charlie.

True. The 1 vote for Sam was really for Sam OR Sam+Charlie.

TY, Mat.

 

[impressive]

Another vote for Group (OR Erotic Couplings) just in. *sigh* I feel a major edit coming on.

So far, here's what I've received:

3 for Group Sex
1 for Mind Control
1 for Romance

On the other question:

1 for Sam
2 for Richard
1 for either Richard or Charlie (unknown which one)

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Another vote for Group (OR Erotic Couplings) just in. *sigh* I feel a major edit coming on.

So far, here's what I've received:

3 for Group Sex
1 for Mind Control
1 for Romance

On the other question:

1 for Sam
2 for Richard
1 for either Richard or Charlie (unknown which one)

Erotic couplings sounds good too.

Sam.

 

[impressive]

Erotic couplings sounds good too.

Sam.

That seems contradictory. Sam would throw it in to Lesbian Sex.

 

[ABSTRUSE]

That seems contradictory. Sam would throw it in to Lesbian Sex.

True, but if Charlies there too it wouldn't be.....why do I even speak sometimes?

 

[impressive]

.....why do I even speak sometimes?

To give us a reason to smack you ???

How much would it take to shift this into a Mind Control story?

 

[sincerely_helene]

To give us a reason to smack you ???

How much would it take to shift this into a Mind Control story?

Just go for it, Imp. Mind control isn't just limited to hypnosis, trust me. Even Manu and Laurel were careful to place in the description "hypnosis AND mind control." It is a more broad topic than people realise.

If it makes you feel better, put up some kind of disclaimer in the beginning. I think it is important it remain with the prequel. To place it anywhere else may just attract immature comments like "not enough fucking," and it's intellectual appeal will be lost in the shuffle of fisting and licking.

P.S. That's actually 2 for Mind Control, since that is your vote also.

 

[impressive]

Just go for it, Imp. Mind control isn't just limited to hypnosis, trust me. Even Manu and Laurel were careful to place in the description "hypnosis AND mind control." It is a more broad topic than people realise.

If it makes you feel better, put up some kind of disclaimer in the beginning. I think it is important it remain with the prequel. To place it anywhere else may just attract immature comments like "not enough fucking," and it's intellectual appeal will be lost in the shuffle of fisting and licking.

P.S. That's actually 2 for Mind Control, since that is your vote also.

Thanks (again), s_h.

 

[sincerely_helene]

Thanks (again), s_h.

Anytime.

 

[cantdog]

I see the story itself as a group sex story with other elements. It needs a little "tightening," too. (Look for ways to say the same thing more briefly and more directly.) But!

I say mind control. The prequel story was in the category, but could have been in another; it didn't require a mind control element to have worked, and the mind control was not the dominating force in the story. It's the same with this one. The mind control is very underground, and the story could proceed without it with few revisions.

The reason I still say "mind control" is because of my negative experience. I swapped a chapter into another category, and then came back to the first cat for the last chapters. My readers dropped off dramatically by switching cats. I think you need to do a story in one cat all the way through.

(I hope the first story was well received by the public in the Mind Control category? I mean, just because I liked it...)

 

[impressive]

I see the story itself as a group sex story with other elements. It needs a little "tightening," too. (Look for ways to say the same thing more briefly and more directly.) But!

I say mind control. The prequel story was in the category, but could have been in another; it didn't require a mind control element to have worked, and the mind control was not the dominating force in the story. It's the same with this one. The mind control is very underground, and the story could proceed without it with few revisions.

The reason I still say "mind control" is because of my negative experience. I swapped a chapter into another category, and then came back to the first cat for the last chapters. My readers dropped off dramatically by switching cats. I think you need to do a story in one cat all the way through.

(I hope the first story was well received by the public in the Mind Control category? I mean, just because I liked it...)

Thanks, cant.

I noticed your response on another thread about remaining in category, too. Yes, "Wetter ..." was very well received but it was also part of Mat's challenge, so that gave it a big boost. Still, it's holding on to a decent spot on the top list, so it must be acceptable to the genre afficionados. If that weren't the case, I'd probably not be as eager to post "Topping Love" there.

Thanks again, everyone, for helping me waffle on this.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

I sent my response, sorry for the delay *HUGS*

 

[impressive]

TY, Colly.

I know I'm being rather anal about this story -- but I can't stop. The characters have hooked me.


Cant, dear heart ... were there any specific passages that jumped out at you per "tightening?" Some of the dialog is rather longish -- mainly because it is quoted directly from some AHers in the "Is no one 'straight'?" thread. I can truncate, but not edit, those direct quotes (although I did take the liberty to clean up spelling & capitalizations).

 

[cantdog]

Well, I'll do a strict blue-pencil on the first few paragraphs. Give you the idea. I'm talking sentence by sentence, consider it. Then think about whether the idea is already presented, do we really need the dependent clause, say ain't that passive voice?, all the sort of questions you ask anyway in the polishing stage.

Writing should be crisp and headlong, especially at first, to drag people in. Lingering is good when there's a good thing to linger over, but it slows people and frustrates them otherwise. Active voice is always better. (Take action, don't have actions be taken.) You'll get the drift when you see the paragraphs.

The dialogue does read a little like a written text, which can be a problem. It's not, though, not usually, in this story. I'll skip down and do some more in the thick of the action, too.

cantdog