Cannot wait until we meet......

[~Dream~]

a dedication poem :
He's given the fire
I yearn with desire
At just the sound of His voice
I'm left with no choice
Unable to imagine the power that He yields
Dont wish to run away from these feelings I feel

Powerless in His hands
Seduced by gentle touch
Wanting His Commands
Needing Him so much

He's keeping me enchanted
By just His voice alone
I look forward to each and every time
He calls me on the phone

To really surrender
is what I want now
To capture His heart
but I do not know how

The teasing seems so endless..
even tho it is quite fun
the never-ending feeling
of wanting to with Him , Be One

My heart races wildly
My body burns with Heat
He spoils me with affection
Cannot wait until we meet


~

_________ ** edited at Judo's suggestion ,ty hun

 

[JUDO]

Hiya -

Fun little ditty. Just lose the "it" after heart towards the end. "My heart races wildly" is fine by itself.

Speaking of submitting, you should submit to your poetry bug more often.


- Judo

 

[WickedEve]

Hi Dream
Long time no see. I see you're still writing. Good!
I thought you two had already met.
Anyway, I want to ask a question. Have you thought of trying free form? I started out writing a lot of rhyme and thought I'd never stop. But I really enjoy free form. It's something you may want to try. I think many times it can make a poem more erotic than rhyme.

 

[WickedEve]

Judo, I just noticed your AV. Are those your Judo Panties? Is that Judo in the Judo Panties? But those aren't Judo's fingers touching Judo's Panties, are they?

 

[~Dream~]

Hiya -

Fun little ditty. Just lose the "it" after heart towards the end. "My heart races wildly" is fine by itself.

Speaking of submitting, you should submit to your poetry bug more often.


- Judo

___________

why ty sweety ,thta means ALOT esp coming from you Judo and yes Wicked ,we Did meet ,this poem is NOT about Artful tho ,lol and Wicked please give me an example about what free form is and how to do it?? ty

 

[JUDO]

Judo, I just noticed your AV. Are those your Judo Panties? Is that Judo in the Judo Panties? But those aren't Judo's fingers touching Judo's Panties, are they?

Yes, maybe and no. (not necessarily in that order).


- Judo

 

[WickedEve]

Judo, you are such a tease.

Dream you can see a lot of free form poetry here: smithpeter

Free form doesn't have to rhyme or have meter but does have rhythm. Judo, or anyone, is that a correct definition of free verse?

Dream.... is Art... uh... no longer in the picture?

 

[JUDO]

Free verse

Free form doesn't have to rhyme or have meter but does have rhythm. Judo, or anyone, is that a correct definition of free verse?

"Free verse" (Be sure to call it that, or the poets who know a thing or two, and are proud of it will rip you a new one -- that doesn't include me.) in my Webster's is described as being poetry without regular meter, rhyme or stanzaic forms.

It's a catchall word for poetry that has no traditional form. Although, I like free verse that seems to have its own sense of meter and can move in and out of rhyme and form at will. Verse like that keeps me more entertained than verse that simply tries to avoid form altogether.

I see my own "free verse" attampts as little descriptive phrases that seem to belong together to convey a larger set of ideas. The set of ideas and an overall theme, taking the place of stanzas, and rhyme. The meter is there, but not strict by any means. It can come and go at will.

If you want to try some, I would start with an idea that is close to your heart (perhaps submission), then try to make a point (submission is exciting) and think of several images that take the reader from not excited to excited. (ropes being tied, clothes being removed, blindfolded, darkness, caresses, absence, anticipation in silence, then a kiss). Something like that. Commnicate each step with phrases that are "cut to the bone." The barest minimum to get the image and emotion across.

Take my first image (ropes being bound):

Around my wrist,
Across my breasts,
Behind my back --
The sweet smell
Of newly released twine.

I hope this helps.


- Judo

 

[WickedEve]

Take my first image (ropes being bound):

Around my wrist,
Across my breasts,
Behind my back --
The sweet smell
Of newly released twine.

This is good, Judo. I'm already getting a mental picture. I'm sniffing at the air for the sweet smell. I'm feeling the ropes. Tie me up! lol You really can say so much with so little.

So is free form unacceptable? I see both free form and free verse used online.

 

[Rybka]

Free Verse/Form

To me free verse should have a central theme and a consistent metre. It is more of a "spoken out loud" form than one meant to be read alone and in silence; a coffee house or recital work. - In that sense it must flow and give pleasure to the ear as well as generate a consistent leitmotif in the mind and/or heart.

I am not sure what "free form" is, except that I see a lot of structured prose submitted as poetry on Lit. when in reality it is just an erotic (?) story following a predetermined format. Almost always it seems to be a really "non-poem" as well as a failed short story.

Regards,                       Rybka

 

[JUDO]

Take my first image (ropes being bound):

Around my wrist,
Across my breasts,
Behind my back --
The sweet smell
Of newly released twine.

This is good, Judo. I'm already getting a mental picture. I'm sniffing at the air for the sweet smell. I'm feeling the ropes. Tie me up! lol You really can say so much with so little.

So is free form unacceptable? I see both free form and free verse used online.

Thanks, Evie. Yeah, I got nailed when I first got to this forum by the poets here at the time when I called it "free form." They used the term "free verse" with that tinge of "something foul has soiled my air" attitude telling me what was what.

So, it is my surmision that "free verse" is the correct in all the books. Even though by its very definition "free form" seems to be as good of a term to me, although, it may be too limited of a view. According to the dictionary, it's not just free of form, it's free of most anything traditionally associated with poetry (in my mind).


- Judo

 

[HomerPindar]

"Free verse is just that - lines of poetry that are written without rules: no regular beat and no rhyme. The vers libre (French for "free line" or "free verse") movement began in the late nineteenth-century Europe, especially in France. [ed. note: DUH] But unrhymed poetry without a regular rhythm had already appeared in translations of the Bible, and one of the first great poets to use the form was Wlat Whitman, an American."
--The Teachers & Writers Handbook of Poetic Forms, 2000, 82.

A very useful, if somewhat over simplified, look at poetic forms.

And, just so long as you don't call it FreeStyle, *I* think you're fine...

HomerPindar