Can I get some feedback on my story

[stiff one]

I'm hoping to get some feedback on a story I wrote if any one has any, I would really like to hear it.
WARNING: This story contanins male bisexual action! If that offends you please do not read it!

In the BDSM section; control 01-05

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

stiff one,

You've got a lot better chance to get some feedback if you post the URL to your story.

RF

 

[stiff one]

Here is a link to my stories.control 01