Unblemished
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I'm working on a sequel to my recent story, https://literotica.com/s/back-to-the-ex, and wanted to work through a few ideas with you all. Or possibly just pontificate to myself until I figure out what I'm doing, hahaha.
At 1000 words the story is very short, but for context: The main character, a spunky and fiery young goth/emo girl, has recently broken up with her boyfriend. He still has one of her hoodies in his house so she shows up and demands it back, but, well, they had some good chemistry together and she falls into temptation. He pulls her knickers from under her skirt, fucks her silly, hands her the hoodie, and kicks her out. Mission accomplished...except he kept her panties, and she's too tired, flustered, and post-orgasmic to process this until after he's slammed the door.
A week later she shows back up in an almost-identical repeat of the story's beginning, except this time, she's asking for her knickers back.
The obvious implication, as a commenter on another site put it, is that "Knickers, My Ass, she was back for more."
So. Sequel. I have a decent idea of where I want to go with it, and I already know how the series ends. But the devil is, as always, in the details.
It would pick up where we left off, with the MC wanting her clothes back. She's telling herself that this time she'll stay strong, get what she came for and leave without any more sexual flings with this guy she now hates. But the thought of what he might have been doing with her worn knickers (jacking off with them, sniffing them, whatever) distracts her, flusters her, and of course turns her on...so they fuck again, and once again he gives her what she asked for and takes something else.
I'm thinking he pulls out and cums on her breasts, staining the shirt she's wearing and causing her to storm away wearing only the aforementioned hoodie over her bra, but I'm not sure yet. If so I'll probably emphasise her tits during the sex, with them bouncing and shifting under the shirt, him reaching under to grope them, etc.
Now, I could leave it there, have the sequel be just another episode in these two's dysfunctional love life, and do a third chapter afterwards. But some people suggested that a longer story might work better and be more to Lits taste. If so the sequel would keep going, and would probably lean into her trying questionable things to stop him from taking her clothes, trying to turn the tables on him, and being in constant denial over the fact that she's really, really not over the guy.
I would also have to go into a bit more detail about their relationship and how it ended.
Perhaps there was no great betrayal on either part, just arguments that went bad and led to them lashing out and breaking up over things said in anger, since by the end I might imply that they get back together. Or I might lean towards it being the MC's fault and that she's too proud to admit it, to justify why she's the one getting her comeuppance in the story. One thing I want to avoid though is anything that would really turn the audience against the female MC, since apparently trolls on here get...intense about certain things.
Also, I'll inevitably have to come up with an actual name for my MC. I'm currently thinking Sally, since it's a normal sounding name that goes against the image of a fiery, dyed-haired goth chick in huge boots in a way I find kinda funny.
Thoughts, anyone?
At 1000 words the story is very short, but for context: The main character, a spunky and fiery young goth/emo girl, has recently broken up with her boyfriend. He still has one of her hoodies in his house so she shows up and demands it back, but, well, they had some good chemistry together and she falls into temptation. He pulls her knickers from under her skirt, fucks her silly, hands her the hoodie, and kicks her out. Mission accomplished...except he kept her panties, and she's too tired, flustered, and post-orgasmic to process this until after he's slammed the door.
A week later she shows back up in an almost-identical repeat of the story's beginning, except this time, she's asking for her knickers back.
The obvious implication, as a commenter on another site put it, is that "Knickers, My Ass, she was back for more."
So. Sequel. I have a decent idea of where I want to go with it, and I already know how the series ends. But the devil is, as always, in the details.
It would pick up where we left off, with the MC wanting her clothes back. She's telling herself that this time she'll stay strong, get what she came for and leave without any more sexual flings with this guy she now hates. But the thought of what he might have been doing with her worn knickers (jacking off with them, sniffing them, whatever) distracts her, flusters her, and of course turns her on...so they fuck again, and once again he gives her what she asked for and takes something else.
I'm thinking he pulls out and cums on her breasts, staining the shirt she's wearing and causing her to storm away wearing only the aforementioned hoodie over her bra, but I'm not sure yet. If so I'll probably emphasise her tits during the sex, with them bouncing and shifting under the shirt, him reaching under to grope them, etc.
Now, I could leave it there, have the sequel be just another episode in these two's dysfunctional love life, and do a third chapter afterwards. But some people suggested that a longer story might work better and be more to Lits taste. If so the sequel would keep going, and would probably lean into her trying questionable things to stop him from taking her clothes, trying to turn the tables on him, and being in constant denial over the fact that she's really, really not over the guy.
I would also have to go into a bit more detail about their relationship and how it ended.
Perhaps there was no great betrayal on either part, just arguments that went bad and led to them lashing out and breaking up over things said in anger, since by the end I might imply that they get back together. Or I might lean towards it being the MC's fault and that she's too proud to admit it, to justify why she's the one getting her comeuppance in the story. One thing I want to avoid though is anything that would really turn the audience against the female MC, since apparently trolls on here get...intense about certain things.
Also, I'll inevitably have to come up with an actual name for my MC. I'm currently thinking Sally, since it's a normal sounding name that goes against the image of a fiery, dyed-haired goth chick in huge boots in a way I find kinda funny.
Thoughts, anyone?