Biology II: Story preview and feedback

[supercheetah]

I'm writing a story right now entitled "Biology II." There's no Biology I story if anyone is wondering.

Anyway, the story takes place at the fictional school Mount Lamont Boys High (which, as the name suggests, is a school consisting of all boys). I've just finished the introductory part of the story, which introduces Ms. Freman, the new teacher for the class, and the class is about to start on the section discussing human sexuality (of course). I have some ideas about where to take the story, but they're not solidified.

One of the ideas is that she would start this section with the discussion of male sexual anatomy, and would constantly have the boys examine themselves, right there in class. She would be instrumental in helping the boys understand their own bodies, and being comfortable with it. I'm not sure exactly of the details, but I'm working on it.

Of course, this isn't the only idea I have, just the one that is currently most likely to be implemented. I'd be happy to hear other people's ideas.

I have been trying to maintain a subtle power balance that's in Ms. Freman's favor, and that's something I want to maintain when the class gets into discussions of the female anatomy, but I'm not sure of how to do this properly, or if there is even a proper way of doing this.

I'm looking forward to your ideas on this story. It's one that I've been wanting to write for a while now, but haven't really had the patience to do so until recently.

PS As far story category goes, I'm not exactly which one to put it in, though I'm thinking Exhibition & Voyeur, First Time, or even Group Sex, but it will depend largely on the direction of the story, of course.

 

[Boxlicker101]

Hi, Super C. I don't have much to suggest but I do want to tell you that anybody who gets involved sexually should be at least 18 years old. As such, it seems to me the boys would be a bit too old to be in a biology class as elementary as the one you are describing.

 

[Rainbow Skin]

A common problem: 18-year-olds who have never masturbated, who lack pubic hair, who are surprised by their budding breasts. It makes a lot of protagonists seem half-witted and genetically crippled.

Okay, so you've got this whole class of 18-year-olds, who are still in school because they had to stay down a year... Well, perhaps you could have the teacher take the line of "Okay, hands up who thinks they know all about sexual anatomy", and then proceed to take them down a peg by telling them about... about... well I can't think of anything specific. Make up something. Call it Van den Budenmeyer's gland and tell them real men have big swollen ones...

 

[Global Carol]

supercheetah, hi.

I’d think the story might develop more easily for you if you knew where you wanted it to end. Once you find a reasonable way around the 18-year-old and above thing, what would you like the teacher to be doing, feeling, thinking, desiring, or detesting at the end?

Do the young men turn her on? Does she act on it or does she fantasize about it? Is there a kind of sex she’s really into? Or is there a kind that she’s never had and thinks ill of? Maybe there’s a change of mind that takes place as she is either acting out her fantasies or just letting them run wild in her dreams at night.

You have a good premise: a young female sex teacher at an all boys school. First ask yourself what happens at the end of the story. Does it end or is it continued for the whole semester? Do you like the characters enough to keep writing about them for another story or two or more?

Now ask yourself what kind of event or events would need to take place to get Mrs. Freman to that ending.

I’ve rambled enough. Take this for what it’s worth.

I wish you good luck on your writing.

Carol