BlackSnake
Anaconda
- Joined
- Aug 20, 2002
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I had to share part of the feedback I got from "Bus Trip". It is by far the best feedback I've gotten. It made me want to take writting more seriously. Maybe I won't through first drafts out there anymore:
I went back to read Bus Trip completely. You did as good a job of getting into
their inner feelings as you could, at least with the mother.
Let me say this: I didn't like the story at all. It was ridiculous, but before
you take offense, it was also good.
Your skills as a story teller are obvious, though the situation you created for
your characters was kind of silly. Still, it's what a short porn story often is
-- ridiculous sex, in ridiculous situations.
...
Good luck on your other stories. BTW, I didn't vote on your story. I won't low
ball a story based on my general dislike of it, but if I did on story telling
ability anyway, I'd rate it a 4.
.....
And this guy hated it. The stuff I cutout is really helpful to me, have to put it in my bag of tricks, but I have to say that it was the best feedback I have ever gotten.
I went back to read Bus Trip completely. You did as good a job of getting into
their inner feelings as you could, at least with the mother.
Let me say this: I didn't like the story at all. It was ridiculous, but before
you take offense, it was also good.
Your skills as a story teller are obvious, though the situation you created for
your characters was kind of silly. Still, it's what a short porn story often is
-- ridiculous sex, in ridiculous situations.
...
Good luck on your other stories. BTW, I didn't vote on your story. I won't low
ball a story based on my general dislike of it, but if I did on story telling
ability anyway, I'd rate it a 4.
.....
And this guy hated it. The stuff I cutout is really helpful to me, have to put it in my bag of tricks, but I have to say that it was the best feedback I have ever gotten.