Best Feedback Ever

BlackSnake

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I had to share part of the feedback I got from "Bus Trip". It is by far the best feedback I've gotten. It made me want to take writting more seriously. Maybe I won't through first drafts out there anymore:

I went back to read Bus Trip completely. You did as good a job of getting into
their inner feelings as you could, at least with the mother.

Let me say this: I didn't like the story at all. It was ridiculous, but before
you take offense, it was also good.

Your skills as a story teller are obvious, though the situation you created for
your characters was kind of silly. Still, it's what a short porn story often is
-- ridiculous sex, in ridiculous situations.

...

Good luck on your other stories. BTW, I didn't vote on your story. I won't low
ball a story based on my general dislike of it, but if I did on story telling
ability anyway, I'd rate it a 4.

.....


And this guy hated it. The stuff I cutout is really helpful to me, have to put it in my bag of tricks, but I have to say that it was the best feedback I have ever gotten.
 
BS,

It's a rush to get "atta boy's." But it's the thoughtful critiques that help you improve as a writer.

Then there are the type ChilledVodka gives which are in a class all by themselves. I've got an incest story "Randi Comes Home" on the New list. This is what CV left on the public comments.

Estela was a nurotic bitch.
06/14/04 by ChilledVodka
Poor Pip

It took awhile for me to remember that early in the story, while big sister is still trying to entice kid brother, he's reading "Great Expectations" for a school assignment.

Rumple Foreskin :cool:
 
Rumple Foreskin said:
I've got an incest story "Randi Comes Home" on the New list.
Have you peeked at my diary again, you durrty old man?
 
Rumple Foreskin said:
ChilledVodka
I'm so ridiculously good at making people giggle.

I'm so cool.

I'm full of aphorism.

I, quite obviously, rock.
 
Randi Grail said:
Have you peeked at my diary again, you durrty old man?
Randi, I'm innocent I tell you; just check out the story. After all, "my" Randi has a different last name, Randi Druitt, and she lacks the awesome pneumatic superstructure on display in your AV.

Cloudy, thanks for the defense-I think.

Rumple Foreskin :cool:
 
I just received this one today. Not my best but definitely a little weird.

"Just read your delicious bookstore story, and my cock is nearly
squirting in my pants. But do I understand that the girl is only 12 years old?
Cookijar, you wicked woman, I think I need to come round and give you
the thorough fucking you deserve..."


BTW...I said I knew the lady in the story since I was 12.

:)
 
Nobody ever gives ME thoughtful criticism...

Its always just - "love it!" Etc, Etc.

Boo hoo. : )

Actually, that's a lie. I got feedback once telling me about how unlikely it was that my heroine could possibly have remained unpregnant after all the sex...detailing quite vividly the nuances of the female reproductive system...quite an eye opener, actually. But don't you hate it when they tell you what you should have done in a really bossy way? I mean, everyone appreciates suggestions, but "rewrite your whole story! Its completely unrealistic!" just kinda erks.

XXX
badgirl
 
cookiejar said:
I just received this one today. Not my best but definitely a little weird.

"Just read your delicious bookstore story, and my cock is nearly
squirting in my pants. But do I understand that the girl is only 12 years old?
Cookijar, you wicked woman, I think I need to come round and give you
the thorough fucking you deserve..."


BTW...I said I knew the lady in the story since I was 12.

:)

Well cj, he was distracted and probably hurrying to get to the end of the story quickly, because as he said, he desperately needed to pee.
 
Today the second chapter of my incest saga got what may be the best two-word feedback I'll ever receive, "Type faster."

Rumple Foreskin :cool:
 
Rumple Foreskin said:
BS,

It's a rush to get "atta boy's." But it's the thoughtful critiques that help you improve as a writer.

...
Rumple Foreskin :cool:

Yes, you're right about this. I was trying to push out about 2K words/day and haven't even glanced back at the previous paragraphs. I was more concerned about getting a boner while writting, than the hardship I was putting the reader through by not editing the story.

I'm more confident that I can tell a good story, now I have to make them readable.
 
bad_girl23 said:
... But don't you hate it when they tell you what you should have done in a really bossy way? I mean, everyone appreciates suggestions, but "rewrite your whole story! Its completely unrealistic!" just kinda erks.

XXX
badgirl

I nice reply would have been...IT'S FICTION!
 
I got one from Chilly,

It's says, "well, who are you, indeed"

He seems to think it's self explanitory, but I'm still trying to figure it out.

It seems vaguely complimentary. At least that's how I'm taking it- I think.

Rumple Foreskin said:
Then there are the type ChilledVodka gives which are in a class all by themselves. I've got an incest story "Randi Comes Home" on the New list. This is what CV left on the public comments.

Estela was a nurotic bitch.
06/14/04 by ChilledVodka
Poor Pip

It took awhile for me to remember that early in the story, while big sister is still trying to entice kid brother, he's reading "Great Expectations" for a school assignment.

Rumple Foreskin :cool:
 
Match Made In Heaven said:
I got one from Chilly,

It's says, "well, who are you, indeed"

He seems to think it's self explanitory, but I'm still trying to figure it out.

It seems vaguely complimentary. At least that's how I'm taking it- I think.

Sound like a compliment to me
 
Got a really good one:

Yea ur Speeeling Sux Dude! I h8 diks who kant speeel! <pop> Oh, I take my head out of my ass and now I don't seem to mind as much! Great story,ignore the asshole! Looking forward to more!
 
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