Begging for feedback

[billy_strokes]

I am an experienced reader and new submitter to Literotica. I have been trying to find a way to entice people to give me feedback on my stories. I currently have 4 stories posted, 2 of which I think are pretty good and two are basically porn (not that that is a bad thing, just not literarily entertaining).

I have actually gotten what I consider alot of views (between 4500 and 12,500) and have done well in voting. Unfortunately out of all those views I have not gotten a single piece of feedback.

I guess I have two requests. If anyone has the time please read my stories and send some feedback. (I don’t even care if you vote, that is not that important to me.) I am especially requesting feedback on "A matter of Trust". I personally felt it was the best of my stories and it has the fewest reads, votes and 0 feedback.

Also do have any authors had any success soliciting feedback. I did read one thread that mentioned asking for it directly in the story, beginning or end. I am going to try this but I was curious if anyone had some other ideas.

By the way if anyone would like me to take a look at something they wrote please let me know. I am open to most topics but I am a can be put off by incest and some non-consent.

Thanks all

 

[hiddenself]

People who give feedback are a very self-selected group. One way to entice them is by being active on this (and other) boards and giving feedback to other writers. Quid pro quo.

 

[Kirk482002]

Your stories.

It would help a bit if you put a link to your stories or your member page to the post. I read "A Matter of Trust" and thought it was good. I sent an e-mail to you expressing in detail what I thought.

Kirk482002

 

[Kirk482002]

Your Profile.

This is the link to your profile.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=300301

 

[Boxlicker101]

I am an experienced reader and new submitter to Literotica. I have been trying to find a way to entice people to give me feedback on my stories. I currently have 4 stories posted, 2 of which I think are pretty good and two are basically porn (not that that is a bad thing, just not literarily entertaining).

I have actually gotten what I consider alot of views (between 4500 and 12,500) and have done well in voting. Unfortunately out of all those views I have not gotten a single piece of feedback.

I guess I have two requests. If anyone has the time please read my stories and send some feedback. (I don’t even care if you vote, that is not that important to me.) I am especially requesting feedback on "A matter of Trust". I personally felt it was the best of my stories and it has the fewest reads, votes and 0 feedback.

Also do have any authors had any success soliciting feedback. I did read one thread that mentioned asking for it directly in the story, beginning or end. I am going to try this but I was curious if anyone had some other ideas.

By the way if anyone would like me to take a look at something they wrote please let me know. I am open to most topics but I am a can be put off by incest and some non-consent.


Thanks all

Since the first of the year I have been adding a paragraph after every story requesting feedback and votes. This works well for votes and probably for feedback too although it is too soon to tell.

You would not be put off by my non-consent. They are strictly role-playing rape and the women in the stories have as much fun as anybody else or more

 

[Singularity]

Mallory Square

I took a read through this one. First off, you should PM Laurel and ask her to fix the italics. An HTML tag is missing somewhere. The entire story is in italics, which makes it harder to read.

My second observation is that this is a "I/You" story. Most authors don't write with the other person as "you" even if they are writing in first person. As numerous others have said before, this has the immediate effect of dis-interesting close to half your readership (assuming half male and half female).

I was a bit disconcerted by her statement mid-way through about "having balls".

Softly you whispered into my ear "Don't ever tell me that I don't have the balls to back a statement up."

I don't think that most women would use that phrase.

Another suggestion is to vary the words you use. You use "dick" a lot, which is an OK term, but when it is used repetitively, it wears down the energy level you are creating. Besides, more people probably relate to "cock" than "dick". "Dick" sounds somewhat teenager-ish.

One other suggestion is to make sure you switch paragraphs when a new person is speaking.

It is a good premise and a nice story idea. I think if you tighten up the wording and the structure a bit, it will be a fine little story.


Singularity

 

[MaxSebastian]

Re: Mallory Square

My second observation is that this is a "I/You" story. Most authors don't write with the other person as "you" even if they are writing in first person. As numerous others have said before, this has the immediate effect of dis-interesting close to half your readership (assuming half male and half female).

This is an important point: All four of your stories are "I/you", which made me want to run for the hills.

 

[Boxlicker101]

I just read the group sex story about the birthday girl. Like the others have said, I don't care that much for stories written in the second person and I usually like a little more dialogue. It could have been better written in the first person referring to the woman by name or pronouns and ditto for the friend. Her disappointment and wishes could have been conveyed by dialogue. The idea was fine and the description was good, except I think you used forms of "slide" too often and "cock" is a better woed to use than "dick.

 

[ButterflyLane]

A Matter of Trust

I liked it... the grapes were a great touch- and I like how you described her emotions- ranging from nerves to flat-out turned on.

 

[Selena Down]

Re: feedback

I know exactly how you feel about the MIA feedbacks. I have tons of views on my stuff, but hardly any votes/feedback. It certainly does assist us writers!