Balancing Story vs. Sex

[NightyKnight]

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[RichardBacula]

I'd say that if you're getting 'H's, you can ignore what a lot of the critics say. Whatever you're already doing is apparently "okay" as-is.

Different people like different amounts of description when it comes to sex. Some people like stuff really sparse, some like stuff a bit more like classic romance novels, and some people like things very explicit.
Personally, I like to zoom in quite a bit into the action, keeping in mind that a lot of the action that happens during sex is mental.
One of my personal pet peeves when it comes to reading erotica is stories where there's a pretty good build-up to the sex scene, but after a bit of foreplay the sex itself is essentially summed up with "and then I fucked her!" or "Then they made love, and she came 7 times!" or whatever.
Then again, I don't need to read a full paragraph describing how a woman looks after a guy comes on her face either, not unless it's REALLY relevant to the story, and/or really well-written.
(And as a rule, it won't be.)

Knowing when to zoom the metaphorical camera in on the action, and knowing exactly how far, is one of the trickier parts of writing IMO, and no matter what you do, there will be people who don't like what you're doing. You can't please everybody all of the time.
But if you're getting 'H's, it sounds like you're pleasing most of them!

Edit: Oh, and if you include a link to your story in your post, I think people will be more likely to read it and give you better feedback here. At least, I'll be more likely to. I'm kinda lazy like that.

 

[TxRad]

Write your stories our way and let the sex fall where it may.

The more you write the better you will get and the more you will learn.

That s the best advice I an give you.

 

[FAWCker]

Write your stories your way and let the sex fall where it may.

The more you write the better you will get and the more you will learn.

That s the best advice I an give you.

Not to nitpick, Tx, but sometimes, a missing letter makes a big difference.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

And most people eat at McDonalds and shop at WALMART. THAT is the meaning of a RED H.

 

[TxRad]

Not to nitpick, Tx, but sometimes, a missing letter makes a big difference.

Thanks for the correction.

 

[Bramblethorn]

By far, most of the comments have been positive, and to my surprise, all four chapters have received the little red H, but the negative comments all generally claim that the sex scenes need more description and more reality. My dilemma is, do I really need to get that technical and descriptive that I have to write "tab A goes in slot B" or is it really okay to be suggestive and let the reader fill in the blanks?

I want to write good stories that appeal equally to both male and female readers, and for me personally, I like a story that just happens to have some hot sex thrown in here and there as opposed to the opposite (sex that happens to have a story interjected around it.) Any advice for the newbie? Thanks!

You'll never please everybody, and if you keep posting eventually readers who like your style will stay & those who don't will move on. If you prefer more plot to sex, then write that way.

 

[NightyKnight]

Following up

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[sr71plt]

Unfortunately, striving to please as many people as you can is a journey to pabulum. But it's your story to set whatever goal, impossible and self-induced frustrating as it might be, that you want to set.

 

[patientlee]

Not to nitpick, Tx, but sometimes, a missing letter makes a big difference.

That is friggin hilarious. (Yes. I've had a glass or three of Chardonnay.)

 

[lovecraft68]

Something I want to mention is someone above spoke of your story having a red H so it must be doing well.

That's true "stat wise" but if you feel you fell short somewhere then perhaps you know you can do better and in your next story work harder for that effect.

Writing is a big learning curve. I started with what you could pretty much just call 'scenes" then just a little set up. If someone showed me something I wrote now, three years ago, I'd say "That couldn't be mine, I wouldn't be able to do that" so you'll get better and better at whatever it is you are trying to do.

I mention the H because don;t be lulled by "Well, hey it must be good" and keep emulating it.

If you as the author feel you can do better then keep trying to do so. Ultimately you're the one that should be happiest with your work.

 

[lovecraft68]

Just clicked your link. Brother sister incest, I'm game to read this and bookmarked it.

I read the comments. Ignore the idiot talking about what Nick should have done. Nick can do whatever you want him to.

I always laugh at where each person draws the line at where they check reality at the door. Because let's face it, most guys who saw their sister stripping would be appalled and leave!

 

[horrorotica]

I suggest you read a few good stories and see how they write sex scenes. Funny thing is sex scenes don't always come naturally to everyone and like anything you need to practice it to hone it.

How to balance story & sex scene is the eternal question we all deal with writing erotic stories. As a new writer you have to understand that writing is a craft, and like all crafts, it takes time and practice to hone it into a good skill. Don't be hard on yourself, just keep doing what you're doing, and most importantly - keep learning.

Hopefully one day (in the not too distant future) you can look back and see that the stories you wrote now were merely the stepping stones to the writer that you will become. If you stick at it, that is.

 

[NightyKnight]

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