AwkwardMD and Omenainen Review Thread

[CharlotteKurai]

Having read your English and your Spanish, I wonder how much better off you would be publishing in Spanish. It's clear that the translation is losing a great deal, possibly because the added difficulty of composing English text causes you to adopt a much more brief, summary-like style.

Yeah but sadly the spanish Literotica, it's dead like, probably when I finished the english version of the story. Even is an non con, my story will have like five alternatives ending, the good one and the truth ending. And the neutral and the bad and worst ending.


Desgraciadamente Literotica en español, está muerto x.x es decir, no es muy activo. Pero cuando termine la versión en inglés, lo publicaré en español pero el problema es que se tarda de subir mucho las historias.

 

[APilgrimSquare]

Not sure if there's a protocol or etiquette around requesting feedback, but I'd like to submit a recent story for review. It's a 14k word I/T story about a first time with the narrator's cousin.

Return to Dungeon Island

The early voting feedback has been underwhelming, at a 3.67 (albeit with only 9 votes), and I'm not exactly sure why. It could be that it's not raunchy enough, that it ends too abruptly, or that the writing just sucks, but it's not so different from my usual fare and it's a full point lower than my average.

I have some other pieces that scored lower than the average (that's how averages work!), but I usually understand why something doesn't land with readers. I'm surprised here, though, and curious if you two might have some feedback/criticism I can use as I develop. No holds barred, brutal honesty is welcome!