First of all, thanks for the feedback! I really do appreciate it. 
A few of my own comments about this story:
Before I wrote this story, I looked through the other stories on the site, and realized that there aren't many subjects, situations, or scenarios that haven't already been written about.
I wanted to write something that was a bit outside the norm.
I thought that one way to help accomplish that was to make the story revolve around the TV and not the sex. If you re-read it, you'll notice that the only dialog in the story comes from the TV. That was deliberate.
I admit it was very tempting at times to put in a line or two of dialog from either of the characters, but I felt that doing so would begin to shift the focus of the story, and quite possibly make the dialog confusing for the reader to follow.
Ultimately, I stuck with my original idea, and I must say that I was personally pleased with the end result. The fact that others enjoy it is the literary equivalent of icing on the cake.
I'll write another one the next time the bug bites.
Thanks again for the feedback!
TheCount ^o^
A few of my own comments about this story:
Before I wrote this story, I looked through the other stories on the site, and realized that there aren't many subjects, situations, or scenarios that haven't already been written about.
I wanted to write something that was a bit outside the norm.
I thought that one way to help accomplish that was to make the story revolve around the TV and not the sex. If you re-read it, you'll notice that the only dialog in the story comes from the TV. That was deliberate.
I admit it was very tempting at times to put in a line or two of dialog from either of the characters, but I felt that doing so would begin to shift the focus of the story, and quite possibly make the dialog confusing for the reader to follow.
Ultimately, I stuck with my original idea, and I must say that I was personally pleased with the end result. The fact that others enjoy it is the literary equivalent of icing on the cake.
I'll write another one the next time the bug bites.
Thanks again for the feedback!
TheCount ^o^
