Audio Stories Feedback

[Trovan]

Hey everyone,

I'm fairly new to this and more of a mystic than a writer / VA.

So some actionable feedback on my work in a way that I can make it more enjoyable would be much appreciated.

https://www.literotica.com/s/friday-audio-1-may-2026

 

[THoney269]

Hey everyone,

I'm fairly new to this and more of a mystic than a writer / VA.

So some actionable feedback on my work in a way that I can make it more enjoyable would be much appreciated.

https://www.literotica.com/s/friday-audio-1-may-2026

No feedback for you yet but wanted to say welcome to the club

 

[THoney269]

Hey everyone,

I'm fairly new to this and more of a mystic than a writer / VA.

So some actionable feedback on my work in a way that I can make it more enjoyable would be much appreciated.

https://www.literotica.com/s/friday-audio-1-may-2026

Your voice and pacing is good. Wondering if you were going for Third Person Omniscient narration or not (because it changes the rest of the feedback)?

 

[Trovan]

Your voice and pacing is good. Wondering if you were going for Third Person Omniscient narration or not (because it changes the rest of the feedback)?

Thanks for taking the time! I thought of first person initially but it felt off. So yes, I decided to try third person narrator mode. Though my attention in hindsight is more on his POV.

 

[THoney269]

thought of first person initially but it felt off.

I figured.. would be willing to proofread/offer different perspective if you'd like

 

[Trovan]

I figured.. would be willing to proofread/offer different perspective if you'd like

I would be super curious how you would solve it.